2015中考复习课件写作指导 26页

BetterYourWritingBetter?How?FuqiaoMiddleSchoolWangJingyu\nLead-inPre-writing\nWhat/Howabout…Let’s…Weshould…Weshouldn’t…GiveadviceindifferentwaysWhatcanwedotosolvetheproblem?It’sbetterforusto…We’dbetter…Don’tforgetto…Don’t…\n学校提倡环保运动。假如你是Amy，准备以“WhatCanWeDofortheEnvironment”为题，写一篇保护环境的英语演讲稿内容包含：1.在购物时用布袋子替代塑料袋；2.离开教室前应关灯；3.最好走路或骑自行车上学；简述理由：保护环境，减少污染，节约能源等注意：1.词数：90词左右。开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计入总词数。2.文章中不能出现真实姓名和校名.参考词汇:clothbag;plasticbagHello,everyone.I’mAmy.Thankyouforyourlistening!While-writing\nWhile-writing话题篇章构成（共____段）1.________2.________________3.______...体裁___(A.演讲稿B.书信C.调查报告)人称时态字数Examinethetopic.（审题）3BeginningMainbodyEndingAFirstPerson(第一人称)90Simplepresenttense(一般现在时)Protectingtheenvironment\nOutlinesampleTopicBeginning:MainBody:topicsentence:（主题句）suggestion1:suggestion2:Ending:Tip1:Writinganoutlinehelpstoorganizeyourideasbetter.suggestion3:It’snicetospeakaboutwhatwecandofortheenvironment.dosomethingtouseclothbagsturnoffthelightswalkorrideabiketoschoolhope\nSample1Hello,everyone.I’mAmy.It’snicetospeakaboutwhatwecandofortheenvironment.Wecanuseclothbags.Wecan’tuseplasticbagswhenwegoshopping.Ithelpstoprotecttheenvironment.Weshouldturnoffthelightsbeforeweleavetheclassrooms.Weshouldsaveenergy.Wecanwalkorrideabiketoschool.Itwillbebetter.Weshouldtryourbesttoreducepollution.Weshouldreducewaste.Eventhesimplesteverydayactivitiescanmakearealdifferencetotheenvironment.Ibelievewecanmaketheworldabetterplacetolive.Thankyouforyourlistening!句型应避免重复\nWhile-writing1.Wecanuseclothbags.Wecan’tuseplasticbagswhenwegoshopping.2Weshouldturnoffthelightsbeforeweleavetheclassrooms.Weshouldsaveenergy.Wecanuseclothbagsinsteadofplasticbagswhenwegoshopping.Don’tforgettoturnoffthelightsbeforeweleavetheclassroomsinordertosaveenergy.Betteryoursentences.\nWhile-writingBetteryoursentences.Tip2:Usebetterwordsandsentences.3.Wecanwalkorrideabiketoschool.Itwillbebetter.4.Weshouldtryourbesttoreducepollution.Weshouldreducewaste.Itwillbebetterifwewalkorrideabiketoschool.Itwillbebetterforustowalkorrideabiketoschool.Weshouldtryourbesttoreducepollutionandwaste.\nHello,everyone.I’mAmy.It’snicetospeakaboutwhatwecandofortheenvironment.________,wecanuseclothbagsinsteadofplasticbagswhenwegoshopping.Ithelpstoprotecttheenvironment._________,don’tforgettoturnoffthelightsbeforeweleavetheclassroomsinordertosaveenergy._____________,itwillbebetterifwewalkorrideabiketoschool.Weshouldtryourbesttoreducepollutionandwaste.________,eventhesimplesteverydayactivitiescanmakearealdifferencetotheenvironment.Ibelievewecanmaketheworldabetterplacetolive.Thankyouforyourlistening!Whatkindofwordsdoweneedtomakethespeechbetter?Linkingwords(过渡词)\nLinkingwords:表并列：表递进:表转折;表因果：表层次：表时间：表列举：表观点:表总结：and,aswellas,both…and,either…or,notonly…butalso,neither…norwhat’smore,besides,inaddition…but,however,yet,afterall,while…because,so,therefore,asaresult…firstly,secondly,thirdly,next,atlast…before,after,while,when,then…forexample,suchas,like,foronething…,foranotherthing…inmyopinion,Ithinkthat…inall,inaword,ingeneral…\nTrytochooseproperlinkingwords_____,thefoodweeatathomeiscleanerandsafer.________,eatingathomedoesn’tcostmuchmoney.________,ithelpsfamilymembersbecomecloser,_______preparingfoodathomeis________fun______meaningful.___________,itencouragesmorecommunicationinthehouse.because,inmyopinion,first,finally,besides,notonly…butalsoFirstBesidesbecauseFinallybutalsonotonlyInmyopinion\nHello,everyone.I’mAmy.It’snicetospeakaboutwhatwecandofortheenvironment.________,wecanuseclothbagsinsteadofplasticbagswhenwegoshopping.Ithelpstoprotecttheenvironment._________,don’tforgettoturnoffthelightsbeforeweleavetheclassroomsinordertosaveenergy._____________,itwillbebetterifwewalkorrideabiketoschool.Weshouldtryourbesttoreducepollutionandwaste.________,eventhesimplesteverydayactivitiescanmakearealdifferencetotheenvironment.Ibelievewecanmaketheworldabetterplacetolive.Thankyouforyourlistening!Makethespeechbetterbyusinglinkingwords.(Youcandoitindifferentways)FirstlySecondlyWhat’smoreInaword\n____________________________________________________Firstly,wecanuseclothbagsinsteadofplasticbagswhenwegoshopping.Ithelpstoprotecttheenvironment.Secondly,don’tforgettoturnoffthelightsbeforeweleavetheclassroomsinordertosaveenergy.What’smore,itwillbebetterifwewalkorrideabiketoschool.Weshouldtryourbesttoreducepollutionandwaste..Trytouseatopicsentencetomakeitbetter.Weshoulddosomethingtoprotecttheenvironment.\nWhatCanWeDofortheEnvironmentHello,everyone.I’mAmy.It’snicetospeakaboutwhatwecandofortheenvironment.Weshoulddosomethingtoprotecttheenvironment.Firstly,Wecanuseclothbagsinsteadofplasticbagswhenwegoshopping.Ithelpstoprotecttheenvironment.Secondly,don’tforgettoturnoffthelightsbeforeweleavetheclassroomsinordertosaveenergy.What’smore,itwillbebetterifwewalkorrideabiketoschool.Weshouldtryourbesttoreducepollutionandwaste.Inaword,eventhesimplesteverydayactivitiescanmakearealdifferencetotheenvironment.Ibelievewecanmaketheworldabetterplacetolive.Thankyouforyourlistening!Tip3:Topicsentencesandlinkingwordshelptomakeyourcompositionwell-organized.\nWhile-writingCheckformistakes.1.Grammar(tense,structures,…)2.Vocabulary(spelling,usages…)3.Nomissingpoints4.Organization5.Handwriting\nCorrectthemistakes（JustforC&Dinyourgroups）1.Iusuallygotoschoolbyabus.2.Therehavemanytreesinthepark.3.IjustwonderwhatshouldIdo.4.Myfatherandmymotherisallteachers.5.Ibelievemydreamwillcometure.6.Hestudiesveryhardly.7.Dosomanyhomeworkismytrouble.8.Wehaveacomputerclassoneweekatime.9.Myparentsdon’tcareme.bybusareIshouldarebothteachers.truehardDoingsomuchhomeworkismytrouble.onceaweekcareaboutme.\n\n“安全你我他，幸福千万家”，重视校园安全有助于我们更好地学习，更幸福地生活。请以“Keepingsafeatschool”为题写一篇英语短文。内容包括：(1)上下楼梯要有序(2)运动避免受伤(3)了解更多安全知识注意：1．词数90左右，开头已为你写好，不计入总词数;2．短文须包括所有要点，不要逐词翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺；3．短文不得出现真实的人名、校名等信息。KeepingsafeatschoolIt’simportantforustokeepsafeatschoolHaveatryPost-writing\nKeepingsafeatschoolBeginning:Mainbody:suggestions:1.2.3.Ending:makeusstudybetterandlivemorehappilymyopiniontopicsentence:Wemustdolikethese.goupstairsanddownstairsinordertrynottobehurtwhendoingsportsknowaboutsomeknowledgeofsafetyWriteanoutline\nKeepingsafeatschoolBeginning:Mainbody:suggestions:1.2.3.Ending:makeusstudybetterandlivemorehappilymyopiniontopicsentence:Writeyourowncompositionaccordingtotheoutline.Wemustdolikethese.GoupstairsanddownstairsinorderTrynottobehurtwhendoingsportsknowaboutsomeknowledgeofsafety\nHandwritingisimportant!书写工整，卷面整洁。+1，反之-2作文评分标准：第一档：16-19分。写出所有要点，语言优美准确，行文连贯，层次分明，选用较好的句型。（错误不超过3处）第二档：12-15分。写出全部要点或缺一个要点，语言基本准确，行文基本连贯，表达基本清楚，文章较通顺。第三档：9-11分。写出大部分要点，语言有较多错误，但文章成型，尚能表意。第四档：5-8分。写出1-2个要点，字数明显不够，语言错误非常多，句子凌乱且不通顺。第五档：0-4分。只有个别句子可读或只写出几个相关单词词组。\nIt’simportantforustokeepsafeatschoolanditwillmakeusstudybetterandlivemorehappily.Inordertokeepsafeatschool,wemustdolikethese.Firstly,Weshouldbeinorderwhenwearegoingupstairsordownstairs.Secondly,makesuretobesafewhenwearedoingsports.Doingsomewarm-upexercisewillprotectusfrombeinghurt.Thirdly,We’dbetterlearnmoreaboutknowledgeofsafety.Inaddition,it’snecessaryforustoraisetheself-protectionawareness.（自我保护意识）Inmyopinion,ifwefollowtheadvice,we’llmakeourselvessafeatschool.BeginningMainBodyEndingKeepingsafeatschool\nSummarya.3stepsinwritingacompositionb.3tipsthathelptomakeabettercomposition\nAssignment：1.Finishyourwritingandtrytomakeitbetter.2.Readsomecompositionsofshowingideasandlearnhowtowriteasimilarone.\n1.It'severyone'sdutytoprotecttheenvironment.2.Cherishlife,safetyfirst.Thankyou