高中英语作文技巧课件 49页

学生：老师，我请假。老师：why?学生：我晕课，尤其是写作课，上作文课我就头疼。\nBadsample卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得10分samplesofstudentwork\nprogresswell∧widenedare词汇有错误;卷面有涂改;得19分.samplesofstudentworkroadsMyhometownisbecomingmoreandmore\n词汇,句型,语法多样化1.覆盖了所有的要点2.应用高级的语法结构和词汇3.有效地使用句子间的连接成分，使结构紧凑4.书面干净整洁要点全连接词如何算是一篇好文章？\n技巧2.使用较高级的词汇4.使用恰当的连接词词汇是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。生动活泼，语言简洁能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。增强书面表达效果的技巧3.使用较丰富的句式1.漂亮的书写形象面子工程的作用\n漂亮的书写是写作得分的亮点影响给分的因素之一：作文的卷面\nWhichcompositionfeelsmoreattractive,why?\n影响给分的因素之二：文中所采用的语言材料人靠衣装，文靠词装A.词汇的选择灵活新颖，出奇制胜；\n1.Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.(幸亏…)2.Ithinkyou’dbetteraskwhatyoudon’tunderstand.3.Luxunisnotonlyawriter,butalsoathinker.Thankstothegoodweather,ourjourneywascomfortable.I.怎样使用较高级的词汇AsfarasI’mconcerned,you’dbetteraskwhatyoudon’tunderstand.ThereisnodoubtthatLuxunisnotonlyawriter,butalsoathinker.感情细腻，表现恰当\nB.句型结构运用灵活多变,增加文章的魅力\nInordertomyparents,Ishouldmakefulluseofeveryminutetostudywhatmyteachertaught.2)我很乐意和你分享我是怎样学英语的I’mgladtosharewithyouhowIlearnEnglish.I’mgladtosharewithyoutheway_______IlearnEnglish*语法，句法高分tipsinwhich定语从句Inordertomakemyparentshappy宾语从句\nE.恰当使用特殊句式，增强语句表现力ＩＴ句，强调句，倒装句型，省略句，感叹句等将下列句子转换：1.Ididn’trealizethemistakeuntilIgrowup.(强调句）2.Wecanmakegreatachievementsonlybyworkinghard.（倒装句）3.Lastbutnotleast,enjoyingsomeEnglishwebsitesishelpfultous.(it)ItwasnotuntilIgrowupthatIrealizedthemistake．OnlybyworkinghardcanwemakegreatachievementsLastbutnotleast,itishelpfultoenjoysomeEnglishwebsites.\n影响给分的因素之三：行文的流畅上下贯通、一气呵成正确而巧妙地使用好连接词\nand,also,besides,morever,what'smorefurthermore,inaddition…1.表递进２.表转折３.表因果４.表目的５.表总结but,however,onthecontrary,ontheotherhand,inspiteof,despite…because,since,therefore,so,thus,asaresult/consequence,onaccountof...inorderthat,sothat,forthepurposeof...inbrief,inshort,inaword,inconclusion,onthewhole...AsfarasI’mconcerned,\n\nIfyouaretheteacher假定你是李华,你的英国朋友Peter来信询问你的英语学习情况并希望你简单介绍自己家乡，请你根据下列要点写回信。要点:1.我学英语已经六年了，在老师和同学们的帮助下取得了一些进步；2.但是总觉得英语难学，尤其是英语中的一些习惯用法；3.今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语，争取能用流利的英语和你写信；4.我的家乡发生很大的变化，盖起了许多高楼，拓宽了道路，变得越来越漂亮和现代化；5.如果有时间可以到中国来，我会带领你参观我的家乡。\n最近在武安市高三年级学生中就市政府“拆违”展开了一场讨论，请你就下表提供的信息给市长写一封信，客观地介绍讨论情况。约70％的学生认为：1．应该拆除违法搭建；2．违法建筑占用绿化带并常堵塞交通；3．大多数违法建筑陈旧过时，既破坏城市的美，又存在安全隐患。约30％的学生认为：1．不宜全部拆除；2．许多违法建筑系下岗职工所建，以便经营一些小生意以养家糊口；3．拆违会使一部分人失去谋生手段。WritingHomework\n注意：1．词数：100左右(不包括已给出部分)；2．文章应包括题中所给的主要信息。可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3．开头与结尾已为你写好。参考词汇：绿化带：greenbelt安全隐患：hiddendangerDearMayor,I'mastudentofSeniorThree.I'mwritingtotellyouaboutthediscussionwe’vehadaboutwhetherthecitygovernmentshoulddemolishillegalbuildings.Opinionsbetweenusaredivided.______________________________________________________________________________________________Bestwishes\ntheillegalbuildingstakenupblockedthetrafficoutofdatebreaksthebeautyofthecityexistssomehiddendangersBrainstormingSupport:Notsupport:outofjobrunsomesmallbusinessMakealiving/supportone’sfamilypulldownthesebuildings\n影响书面表达得分的因素：“大错误”包括时态错误、句子结构错误、中式英语等，如：Myhometownhadbigchange,buildmanyhouses,……Myhometownhasgreatchanges.◆语言表达出现“大错误”及“小错误”→Greatchangeshadtakenplaceinmyhometownthere.Forexample,manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.\n3.IfyougettoChinathathavetime,mewithyoulookmyhometown.4.Iwillwelcometoyou.◆“小错误”主要是反应在个别单词拼写错误、冠词介词使用不准确等方面,如：Undermyteacherandclassmatesallhelptome,…….→Ihopeyou’llgetachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.→WelcometoChina.→Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,……\n◆没有使用高级词汇和复杂句1.Iwillvisitmyhometownwithyou.2.Ifyouhavetime,Iwilltakeyoutotravelaroundmyhometown.→Iwillshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.\n◆书写是否工整清晰也会影响答卷得分。卷面不整洁，涂改多；大小写;标点符号;书写不清，得分会很低！\n◆审题不认真，要点有所遗漏1.彻底理解题意，看准答题要求（包括字数要求）。2.把内容要点在稿纸上列成提纲。3.连词成句，连句成文。4.成文后认真检查，确信无一遗漏。注意：\n★完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。★应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。★语法结构和词汇方面有些错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。★有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。书面表达评分最高标准（第五档21---25分）\nOnepossibleversion:June8,2008DearPeter,I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadesomeprogressinEnglish.HoweverIstillfindEnglishhardtolearn,suchassomedifficultidiomswhichmademeconfused.Nomatterhowharditis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.\nNotlongagoIreturnedtomyhometownandfoundgreatchangeshadtakenplacethere.Manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.Myhometownisgettingmodernandmoreandmorebeautiful.IhopeifyouhaveachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownwhenyouareonleave.Bestwishes,LiHua\nMySuggestions:1.beautifulwordsandexpressions2.propersentencestructures3.connectionsbetweensentences4.propercomplexsentences5.writingmodels\nSixstepsforwriting(写作六步骤）1.Cross-question(审题)※Mainidea※Style※Verbtense※Person2.Seizethemajorpoints/keywords(抓要点)3.Arrangement(布局)！4.Sentencesconnection(连句)Words/phrasesSentences6.Errorcorrecting(查错改错)5.Expressyouropinion(发表观点）Conjunctions/conjunctiveadverbssentencespassage\nDearSmithLiHuaYours22Iwassopleasedtohearfromyouandamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutmyschool.You’reright.Quiteafewchangeshavetakenplaceinourschool.Ononesideoftheroadisanewteachingbuilding;Ontheotherside,wheretheplaygroundusedtobe,standsanothernewbuilding-ourlibrary.Theplaygroundisnowinfrontoftheschool.Wehavealsoplantedalotoftreesinandroundtheschool.Ihopethatyouwillbeabletoreturnandseethechangesforyourselfsomeday.Bestwishes,\n注意：1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头语已为你写好。June8,2008DearPeter,I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.………….\n字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，不得分。samplesofstudentwork\nreadandwritefindithardfluentEnglishtowriteGreatchangesroadshadtakenplaceinmyhometownbuildingswidenedItwillbewonderfulwhenyoucometoChinaifyouarefreeshowyouaroundIwillbegladto语言不地道;中文式思维;语言错误较多，得分13分samplesofstudentwork\nlearnoftheteachersandmyprogressreadandwriteithardtolearnhardwork.writelettersinfluentEnglishfoundhadbecomeWelcometoChinaifyouhavetimeshowyouaround语言素质较好;基本功不差;语句仍有毛病；得15分.samplesofstudentwork\nPracticeFindsomesimilarwordsorphrasesofthefollowingsgood2.think3.cleverperfectexcellentoutstandingpleasantwonderfulfavorablemagnificentinone'sopinion/viewholdtheviewthat…itiswidelysharedthat…wisebrightsmartintelligentcute\nIII.常用的连接词1.表示递进;在同一话题上补充内容另外，还有：2.表示转折关系但是，然而，相反：what’smore;besides;also;moreover;inadditionbut;however;yet;instead;ontheotherhand;onthecontrary.\n3.表示因果关系因为，因此，所以:4.表示条件关系如果，只要:除非:否则:since;as;because(of);so;thus;therefore;asaresult;if;oncondition(that);aslongasunlessorelse\n5.表示时间关系当…的时候:when;while在…之后:after在…之前:before直到:until直到…才…:not……until……一…就…:assoonas后来，然后:later;afterwards不久:soon近来:lately;recently自从…:since从那时起:fromthenon\n6.表示特定的顺序关系首先:firstly最主要的:aboveall其次:secondly然后:then;next最后:finally;intheend7.换一种方法表述换句话说:inotherwords;thatistosay;\n8.进行举例说明例如，比如:9.用于陈述事实forinstance;forexample;like;suchasthatistosay,namely,actually,andsoon,believeitornot,　totellyouthetruth,forthisreason实际上:infact;actually;asamatteroffact跟你说实话:totellyouthetruth\n10. 对一个话题进行总结总而言之，总的来说:onthewhole;inshort;allinall;ingeneral;inaword,finally,inconclusion,generallyspeaking,asyouknow,intheend,其它常用到的副词therefore;otherwise;finally;furthermore;thus;namely;although;afterwards;personally;\n12.表示结果：thus,therefore,so,asaresult,seeingthat,luckily,unfortunately13.表示强调：aboveall,indeed,surely,certainly,ofcourse,afterall,withoutanydelay,atleast,atmost,mostimportant,undoubtedly\n6.表示特定的顺序关系首先:firstly最主要的:aboveall其次:secondly然后:then;next最后:finally;intheend7.换一种方法表述换句话说:inotherwords;thatistosay;\nII.丰富的句式：(常用到的句型结构）利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思，能增加文章的文采。HowhappyIwaswhenIreceivedyourletter!Itwasthisyoungboywhohelpedtheoldgranny.Onlyinthiswaycanyousolvethisproblem.Theyreadwhilewalkingorridingonabus.1.感叹句2.强调句3.倒装句4.省略句\nIsawayoungladywalkingslowlyinthestreetwithahandbaginherhand.Let’scometothemainteachingbuilding,atthebackofwhichstandstheschoollibrary.That’swhatIshoulddo.Timepassedquicklybeforeweknewit.5、with短语6、定语从句7、各种名词性从句8、各种状语从句\n联合国教科文组织某考察团正在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是接待人员,请根据下列提示以发言稿的形式简要介绍这个村的情况：1)大小：近100户人家，约500口人。2)变化：过去很穷，78年后变化很大。人们生活比以前好多了。现已旧貌换新颜。3)教育：原来的学校很小，现已经过改建。新建的教学楼有4层，是村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄儿童在此免费就读。注意：1）要点齐全，前后连贯。2）词数：100-120之间。PracticeLadiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool.Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peopleherearericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.Theschoolherewasverysmall.Nowithasbeenrebuilt.Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas4storeys.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildinginthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Thankyou.\nLadiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool!Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool!①Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②Ithaschangedalotsince1978③.Peoplehere④arericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.①Thisvillageisasmallonewith/whichhasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②However,ithaschangedalotsince1978③andhasbeendevelopingveryfast.Peoplehere④liveamuchbetterlifethanbefore.书面表达：Nowitistakingonanewlook.\nInthepast,theschoolherewasverysmall⑤.⑥Nowithasbeenrebuilt.⑦Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas4storeys⑧.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildinginthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑨Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.⑩Thankyou.Inthepast,theschoolherewasverysmall⑤andmostchildrencouldn’taffordtogotoschool.⑥Butnowithasbeenrebuilt⑦and⑧whichhas4storeysisthemostbeautifuloneinthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑨What’smore,theyenjoyfreeeducation.⑩Mayyouenjoyyourstayherethenewlybuiltteachingbuilding/Mayyouhaveapleasanttimehere!Thankyou.\nGoodbye!