高中英语写作课课件 17页

Writing\nDISCUSSION:Whatisagoodwriting？Content:everythingneededincludedwhichisrelatedtoyourview.(内容要完整)Structure:*Goodbeginningandending(好的开头结尾)*Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped(结构合理,行文流畅)Language:*NoChinglish(避免中文式英文)*NoGrammaticalmistakes(没有语法错误)*Withexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns(词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化)\nI'mverypleasedtotellyouthechangesofmylifesincethereductionoflearningloadwasbroughtin.Beforethat,Iwasoftenexhaustedatweekends.Iattendedschoolandhadclassesthewholeday.Intheevening，IwasoftenforcedtodomyboringhomeworkandIcouldnotgotobeduntil11:30.Sincetheprogramofreducinglearningloadwasintroduced,mylife,however,hasbecomemuchmoreinteresting.Ifrequentlypayavisittomuseums,dropinatcomputerroomsanddrawpicturesinmyleisuretime.Afterlunch,IwatchTV,readstoriesandlookthroughnewspaperstoenrichmyself.NolongerdoIstayup;onthecontrary,Igotobedatabout10p.m.Inshort,Iamquitesatisfiedwithmylifenow.StructureEnjoythefollowingparagraphs:\nNowinthecountryareas,therearemanychildrenoutofschool.Thereasonscanbelistedasfollow.____________,mostfamiliesaretoopoortosendtheirchildrentoschool.__________,theyhavenochoicebuttostayathomeandmakemoney.asaresult;Inaddition;Tobeginwith;HoweverTobeginwithAsaresult使用恰当的连接词Useproperlinkingwords\n__________,someparentsthinkthereisnoneedfortheirdaughterstogotoschool.Therefore,theydon’tletthemgotoschool._______,somechildrenarenotinterestedintheirstudies.______________________,somewouldn’tliketogotoschool.Inmyopinion;Finally;Tomakemattersworse;InadditionInadditionFinallyTomakemattersworse\nAsfarasI’mconcerned,allthechildrenincludinggirlsshouldbeeducated._______,thewholesocietyshouldputgreatemphasisonchildren’seducation________they’llplayanimportantpartinthefutureofourcountryoneday.besides;However;because;ThereforeBesidesbecause\nAvoidChinglish!1)TrafficinShanghaiistoocrowded.2)TherehasahighwayconnectedwithBeijing.3)Thoughthetransportisgood，butitfadesnexttoournaturalresources.4)Iforgotmydictionaryathome.5)Itwillcostusmuchmoneytobuyone.Languageheavy.leftistake\n改错Itbuiltinthe1980s.Inourcity,thepublicorderisbetterthanotherplaces.Buyacellphoneistooexpensive.Thepublicorderisverywell.Atthelast，Ihopeyoucaninvesthere.Thegovernmentislikeinvestorstocomehere.Letmeintroducethiscityforyou.Thankyouforyoucome.Ithinkyoucanhappy.Tomysurprised,myfatheragreedtobuyone.thatofgood\likestoyourcomingbeˇ∧∧wasBuyingsurpriseLanguage\n改错Alotoffamiliesaremuchmorepoor.I’mveryhappyIcanwritelettertoyou.Somearenotinterestinlessons.Ithinkeverychildisequality.Becauseoftheirparentsdon’thaveenoughmoney.Icankeeptouchwithmyfamily.Someparentsthinkgotoschoolisnotgood.Everychildincludinggirlsshouldhavethechancetoaccepteducation.Therearemanyfamiliesarepoor.Someparentsinvillagethinkthatgirlsarenotimportantaswellasboys.very∧interestedequalgoingreceive∧theina∧Language\nAdoptavarietyofsentencepatterns使用较丰富的句式Whenhearrived,hegavemeane-mailimmediately.(使用V-ing形式)2.Onceitisseen,itcanneverbeforgotten.(过去分词)_____________,hegavemeane-mailimmediately.Whenarriving/Onhisarrival,__________,itcanneverbeforgotten.Onceseen\n3.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.(使用名词性从句)4.Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff.(改被动语态)_____________________thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.Whatsurpriseshimisthat________________theconferencebeputoff.Itissuggestedthat\n5.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.(使用强调句型)6.Ipassedthephysicsexambecauseofyourhelp.(用虚拟语气）_____________hehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper_____heknewwhathadhappened.___________________thephysicsexam________yourhelp.ItwasnotuntilthatIcouldn’thavepassedbutforwithout\n7.Iwon’tbelievewhathesays.(使用状语从句)8.Thegirlisspokenhighlyof.Hercompositionwaswellwritten.(用定语从句)______________hesays,Iwon’tbelieve.Thegirl_____________________________isspokenhighlyof.NomatterwhatwhosecompositionwaswellwrittenWhatever\n9.Ifyoustudyhard,youwillmakerapidprogress.（用并列句）10.HehadnosoonercomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad.(使用倒装句)______________hecomebackfromBeijing______hewassentabroad.___________________makerapidprogress.Studyhard,andyou’llNosoonerhadthanHardly….when..\nassessPleaselearntoYourcompositionwhenyoufinishitfromnow.\n书面表达评价表项目自评他评1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划?2.句子开头注意大小写了吗?3.有没有注意标点符号?4将文章分段了吗?分成了几段?5有单词拼写错误吗?几个?6.有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态?7.注意主谓一致了吗?8.有没有语态的错误?9.有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗?10.有没有词性的错误?哪一种?11.简单句表达正确吗?12.是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构?13.表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗?14.有没有用好词好句?用了哪些?\nSeeyou!