高中英语教学课件 书面表达的写法 21页

书面表达·应试策略\n一、近几年湖北省高考书面表达命题特点试卷命题形式体裁题材2005年汉语提示+提纲书信建议在国外学习的堂兄回国工作2006年汉语提示+图表调查报告对高中生英语阅读兴趣的调查2007年汉语提示书信计划到养老院去慰问老人\n二、写作要求内容要点的完整性词汇运用的准确性语言的得体性上下文的连贯性字数及书写\n三、2007年湖北高考书面表达假设你是某中学学生会主席李华，你校与本地一所国际学校经常举办联谊活动。你计划在重阳节组织学生到养老院去慰问老人，拟邀请国际学校的学生参加。请根据以下内容要点给国际学校的学生会主席Tony写一封信。要点：向老人赠送礼物（鲜花、自制贺卡……）；为老人提供服务（做清洁、陪老人聊天……）；为老人表演节目（唱歌、跳舞……）。注意：1.词数为100左右；2.信的开头和结尾已为你写好（不计入总词数）；3.已给出的信的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。\n2007年湖北高考书面表达评分实例(Ⅰ)Wecangivetheoldmenandtheoldwomensomeflowersandcardsforcelebratebyourselves.Wecanhelptheoldmenandtheoldwomencleantheirroomsandtalkwiththem.Wecansinginganddancingtogivetheoldmenandtheoldwomentolook.Ithinktheywillveryhappy.（5分）分析：1.该答卷的词数为56，未达到规定词数，影响信息内容的完整；2.内容要点虽都有涉及，但有很多语法结构方面的错误，词汇项目有限；3.缺乏语句间基本的连接成分，内容不连贯。\n分析：1.基本上表叙清楚了题目规定的所有主要内容；2.时态运用恰当（一般将来时）；3.采用了一些简单的连接手法，内容较连贯，如：also,ofcourse,As;4.语法、词汇方面的错误较前面大大减少，但从准确性角度考虑仍存在一些问题。（15分）(Ⅱ)IthinkitisveryhelpfultousandtheoldmeninNursingHome.Wecanlearnmanythingsfromthose.Wewillgivethemflowersandcardswhichmadebyourselves.Wealsocanhelpthemwithcleaningandwecanjointhemtochattogether.Ofcourse,wemaypreparesomeprograms,justlikesing-ing,dancingandsoon.Ithinktheoldmenwhoarealwaysalonewillbeveryhappyandwillfeelthattheyareathomes.Asstudents,don’tweoughttohelpothers?Pleasethinkaboutit.\n(24分)分析：1.语言错误较少；2.行文流畅，应用了较丰富的句子结构和词汇；3.有效地采用了不同的连接手段，全文结构紧凑，层次清楚；4.英文书写工整漂亮，卷面整洁。(Ⅲ)Themainactivitiesareasfollows.Firstly,wewouldliketogivetheelderlyourpresents,suchasflowers,cardsmadebyourselves.Thiswillcreatagoodatmosphereforouractivity.Secondly,we’llservetheelderly,doingthecleaningandchattingwiththem.Atlast,severalprogrammes,whicharewellprepared,aregoingtobepresentedtothem.Theseincludesinginganddancing.Whatdoyouthinkofit?Itisameaningfulactivity,isn’tit?Theelderlyisinneedofourcare,andyoucanalsolearnmoreaboutourculture.Theelderlyhascontributedalottosociety,nowitistimethatwethankedthem.\n四、基本步骤审题抓要点扩展成句连句成文检查誊写\n1、语言的准确性、得体性agoodmankind,honest,generous,selfless,brave,warm-hearted,sympathetic,honorableEg:Peterisagoodman.todietopassaway,toleaveus,one’shearthasstoppedbeatingEg:PremierZhoudied,andwefeltsorrowful.五、能力储备\n2.正确使用有关连接词时间先后：first,then,later,intheend,eventually,sincethen,afterawhile转折关系：but,however,onthecontrary,nevertheless因果关系：because,since,as,thanksto,owingto,asaresultof,forthereasonthat让步关系：though,although,evenif,eventhough,inspiteofthefactthat\n表列举：forexample/instance,take…forexample,that’stosay,inotherwords,asfollows表总结：inshort,inbrief,inconclusion,inaword,onthewhole,ashasbeenstated递进关系：what’smore,inaddition,furthermoreononehand…ontheotherhand,条件关系：if,unless,aslongas,onconditionthat…\n3、固定词组和句型的使用a.表“我认为”_____playingcomputergameisawasteoftime.Iholdthat…/Iaccepttheideathat…AsfarasI’mconcerned…/AsfarasIcansee…Itseemstomethat…/frommypointofview…b.表“一…就…”_____thechildsawhismother,hecried.assoonas,on/upondoing…themoment/instant/minute,immediately,hardly/scarcely…when,nosooner…than…\n4、注意语言表达的多样性Largecrowdsoftouriststothezoowillmaketrafficjams.Largecrowdsoftouriststothezoowillresultintrafficjams.Someofmyclassmatesarefortheopinion.Someofmyclassmatesareinfavoroftheopinion.\n5.适当使用较复杂的句法结构a.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.a.Theshipdidn’tsinkbecauseoftheeffortsofthecaptain.b.Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.b.Butfortheeffortsofthecaptain,theshipwouldhavesunk.\n六、实际操练你所在的班级将要举办一次主题为“WhatCanWeDoforOurSchool?”的英语演讲比赛。请写一篇英语演讲稿，要求从以下四方面中任选二个进行阐述，并举例加以说明。1.关心他人；2.美化校园；3.爱护学校设施；4.营造良好的学习氛围注意：1.不要在书面表达中出现所在学校的校名和本人姓名，否则本节判为零分2.词数：100左右；3.参考词汇：爱心—loveandcare;校园—campus;设施—facilities;氛围—environment；4.开头和结尾已经写好，且不计入词数。Hello,everyone.It’snicetospeakaboutwhatwecandoforourschool,andIthinkeachofuscandosomething.______________________Thankyouforlistening.\nHello,everyone.It’snicetospeakaboutwhatwecandoforourschool,andIthinkeachofuscandosomething.qThefirstthingwecandoistomakeourcampusmorebeautiful.Everyoneofusmayplantatreeintheschool,ororganizeathoroughcleaningonthecampus.Wecanalsoformagoodhabitofputtingtherubbishinthetrashcan.Besides,neverforgettoturnoffthelightorclosethedoor.Weshouldnotleavethetapwaterrunningorwasteanymaterialsinthelaboratoryclass.Ifeveryonedoesonethingforourschool,Ibelievewewillturnourschoolintoabetterplacetostudyandlivein.(评论）Thankyouforlistening.Onepossibleversion\n七、总结建议切中题意，不漏要点,卷面整洁；语言得体、准确、连贯、多样；积累“语言经验”,培养“语言意识”；观察品味，模仿训练；\n讨论类书面表达模式P1:RecentlyourclasshashadadiscussionaboutwhetherseniorstudentsshouldsurftheInternet.p2:Someofmyclassmatesareinfavorof…Theysay…Theyalsosay…what’smore…P3:However，otherstudentsareagainsttheidea，sayingthat…so…Onetheotherhand，otherstudentsthink…Theysuggest，however，…P4:Inmyopinion,\n1.1.Therailwayownerswouldnottakeanychances,sotheyhiredmanyhunterstoforewildlyintothebisonalongthetracks.2.Thebisonwerelefttorotslowlywheretheyfell.3.Asaresult,theinsectswhichlivedontheseplantsalsodiedout.4.Thisinturnproducedlessfoodsupplyforbirds,theprairiedogandwolves.5.Thusthechangeinthenumberofbisonhadaneffectonthewholewildlifechainoftheplains.6.Afterbeinghuntedandkilledforalmost90years,thebisonwerefinallyleftalone.7.Theseeffortswerenotinvain.\n对比是通过对两种或两种以上的不同事物，或者同一种事物的不同情况进行比较，从而得出结论。对比是说明和论证的常用方法。●运用对比写作时要注意：明确对比的目的，弄清楚通过对比到底要说明什么。●表示对比的常用语：表示相似点的有：like;likewise;similarly;inthesameway;also;equally;too;as等等。表示不同点的有：unlike;however;but;yet;while;though;although;eventhough;instead;onthecontrary;incontrastto;ononehand...,ontheotherhand等等。\n●对比的常用写作方式：1.对两种或多种事物的异同之处逐点进行比较对照，格式为：A1,B1,C1,...;A2,B2,C2,...;A3,B3,C3,...;...（简述为A+B+C+...模式）2.先分别列出两种或多种事物的异同之处，然后进行比较对照，格式为：A1,A2,A3,...;B1,B2,B3,...;C1,C2,C3,...;...（简述为A/B/C/...模式）如：Somepeoplesaythatrailwaysaremoreimportantthanroads.Butinmyopinion,roadsaremoreimportantthanrailways.Railwaysdonottouchsmallplaces,whileroadscanbebuilttoreacheveryplace,evenvillagesinfarcornersofthecountry.Railwaysarebuiltonlyfortrains,butroadswillproveequallyusefulforbicycles,carriagesandotherkindsofvehicles.Thecostofbuildingaroadisalsolowerthanthatofbuildingarailway.