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LearningtowriteSunny\nIlikeLiuQian.Heisacreativemagician.IlikeLiuQianbecauseheisacreativemagician.\n2009CCTVSpringFestivalGalasurpriseddidmagicshowsHedidmagicshowssowellthateveryonewasreallysurprised.so…that…(春节联欢晚会）Hedidmagicshowswell.Everyonewassurprised.\nHetooktheringoutofanegg.Peoplecheeredforhim.whenassoonasafterbecause\nwonmanyprizesworkedhard,Makesentenceswithsuitableconjunctionbecauseso…that…beforeafterwhen(连词）\nnotlike,fish,healthyalthoughso…that…butbecauseMakesentenceswithsuitableconjunction(连词）\nknewLiuQian,met,2001,Beijingnot…until…whenassoonasbeforeaftersinceMakesentenceswithsuitableconjunction(连词）Jay\nComparethearticlesWhicharticledoyouthinkisbetter?Why?LiuQinwas7yearsold.Hefellinlovewithmagic.Hegraduatedfromtheuniversity,thenhebecameamagician.Hedoesn’thaveateachertoteachhim,butheworksveryhard.Hespendsallhistimethinkinghowtodesigntheshows.Healsodidshowsonstreetstoimprovehimself.Everyoneknowsitisthebiggestchallengeforamagician.WhenLiuQianwas7yearsold,hefellinlovewithmagic.Hedidnotbecomeaprofessionalmagicianuntilhegraduatedfromtheuniversity.Nooneknowsthathelearnsbyhimself.Heworkssohardthatheevendoesnothavetimetorelax.Hespendsallhistimethinkinghowtodesigntheshows.Healsodidshowsonstreetstoimprovehimself.Asweknow,itisthebiggestchallengeforamagician.complexsentence(复合句）\nJackLiuQian‘spenpal\nTalkShowNameJackFamilyparents,died,caraccidentHobbywatchLiuQian’smagicshowsweekendactivitiesbusy,dohomework,takelessonsProblemstressedout,examHisparentsdiedinacaraccident.HelikeswatchingLiuQian’smagicshows.Onweekendsheisbusy.Hedoeshishomeworkandtakeslessons.Heistoostressedoutbecauseoftheexams.BirthdayMarch.12th,1994HewasbornonMarch.12th,1994.Theboy’snameisJack.\nJackusedtohaveahappyfamily.Unluckily,hisparentsdiedinacaraccident.Hewas10yearsold.However,hedoesn’tgiveuphimself.Heworksveryhard.Hegetsgoodgrades.HelikeswatchingLiuQian’smagicshowstorelaxhimself.Heisatopstudent.Hehasabigproblemthesedays.Heistoostressedout.Theimportantexamiscoming.▼when▼so▼that▼Although▼becausebecause,although,when,so…that\nDearJack,Iknowyouhavemanyproblems.Youhavemuchhomework.Youhavetosleeplate.Thenyoufeelsleepyinclass.Youaretoostressedoutbecauseoftheexams.Youstudyhard.YourEnglishisnotgood.HereIhavesomeadviceforyou.First,whynotsleepalittleearlier?Youdon’twastetime.Youcanfinishyourhomeworkquickly.Second,you’dbetterrelaxyourselfbywatchingmyshow.Third,youmustbeconfident.Ihopeyouwillbebettersoon.Yours,LiuQian\nDearJack,Iknowyouhavemanyproblems.Youhavesomuchhomeworkthatyouhavetostayup.Thenyoufeelsleepyinclass.Youaretoostressedoutbecauseoftheexams.Althoughyoustudyhard,youarenotgoodatEnglish.HereIhavesomeadviceforyou.First,whynotsleepalittleearlier?Ifyoumakefulluseofeveryminute,youwillfinishyourhomeworkquickly.Second,you’dbetterrelaxyourselfbywatchingmyshow.Third,youmustbeconfident.Ihopeyouwillbebettersoon.Yours,LiuQian充分利用\nWritingstrategy:properconjunctions(适当的连词)Otherways:goodphrases（词组）Howcanwemakethearticlesmorefluent(流畅的）andmorebeautiful?wonderfulsentencepatterns（句型）\nWritingShow假如你是Jack,写信给刘谦，感谢他的建议，并告诉他你的变化以及对考试的信心。你的变化包括：1.按时完成作业，睡眠每天8小时…2.学习努力…取得好成绩…3.自信，不紧张…\nDearLiuQin,Thanksforyourlastletter.Youradviceisreallyhelpful.Ihavechangedalot.Now…Theexamiscomingsoon.ActuallyIamnotworriedatall.IbelieveIwilldoagoodjobafterworkinghard.Yours,JackDon’tforgettoshowuswonderfulsentences!\nSampleIhavechangedalot.Now,Ifinishmyhomeworkontimeandhardlystayuplateatnight.BecauseIsleep8hourseveryday,Iamenergeticinclass.Also,Imakefulluseofeveryminute.IstudysohardthatIcangetgoodgrades.Totellyouthetruth,Iamprettyconfidentnowanddon’tfeelnervousatall.What’smore,IoftenwatchyourshowswhenIfeeltired.Howwonderfulyourshowsare!\nHomeworkImprovetheletteryouwrote.B.Sharetheletterwithyourfriend,findandlearnsomebettersentences.