【教案】高中英语写作方法及写作中常见错误教案 7页

写作训练请以记者的身份,根据案件登记卡所提供的情况，用英语写一篇新闻报导稿。字数：120左右案件信息时间昨天下午四点五十分,银行关门前地点公园路一家银行天气大雨,道路通畅事件:目击者讲两个带面罩的年轻人用枪威胁银行职员,携两百万美金逃跑.没有人受伤或遇害.警察正在搜查这两名抢劫犯.英语作文“六步法”教学Step1．仔细审题Step2.理清要点Step3.译写单句Step4.连句成篇Step5.检查润色每句话写好后，用适当的连词接起来，使之上下连贯，呼应，通顺，简洁。适当地用一些高级词汇短语和句式检查一下有没有时态，语态，拼写错误并逐一加以改正Step6.定稿誊写卷面整洁干净Step1:仔细审题这是一篇新闻报道,主要是讲公园路发生的一起抢劫.注意有时间,人物,时间,地点,天气。涉及到的词汇有:robber,robbery,rob,littletraffic,eyewitness,threaten,clerk,injure,searchfor.字数:120左右Step2：理清要点1.抢劫发生在昨天下午四点五十,银行关门前。精品学习资料可选择pdf第1页，共7页-----------------------\n2.银行位于公园路。3.当时在下大雨,道路通畅。4.目击者陈述抢劫犯是2名戴面罩的年轻人,他们用枪威胁职员,抢走了2百万美元。5.抢劫中无人受伤或遇害。6.警察正在搜寻他们。Step3：译写单句?Arobberyhappenedat4:50p.m.yesterdaybeforethebankwasclosed.?ThebankwasintheParkStreet.?Itwasrainingheavilyandtherewaslittletrafficontheroad.?Theeyewitnesssaidthattworobbersweretwoyoungmenwithmasks,andtheythreatenedtheclerkswithguns.Theyrobbed2milliondollars.?Noonewasinjuredorkilledintherobbery.?Thepolicearesearchingforthem.Step4：连句成篇Arobberyhappenedat4:50p.m.yesterdaybeforethebankwasclosed.ThebankwasintheParkStreet.Anditwasrainingheavilywithlittletrafficontheroad.Theeyewitnesssaidthatsuddenlytwoyoungmenwithmasksrushedintothebankandthreatenedtheclerkswithguns.ThenTheyrobbed2milliondollars.Luckily,noonewasinjuredorkilledintherobbery.Thepolicearesearchingforthem.Step5：检查润色Yesterdayafternoon,arobberyhappenedinabankintheParkStreet.Accordingtothewitnesses’statements,itwasat4:50pm,justbeforetheclosingtimeofthebankthattherobberyhappened.Anditwasrainingheavily/catsanddogs,withlittletrafficontheroadoutside.Suddenly,twoyoungmenwithmasksrushedinandthreatenedtheclerkswithguns.Thentheyrushedoutanddrovedawaywithabout2,000,000dollars.Allthethingslastedforonlyafewminutes.Fortunately,therewasnobodyinjuredorkilledintherobbery.Nowthepolicearesearchingfortherobbers,hopingwhoevergetstheconnectedinformationcallsthemupassoonaspossible.精品学习资料可选择pdf第2页，共7页-----------------------\nStep6:定稿誊写卷面整洁干净学生习作中的典型语言错误：一、张冠李戴Abandwasrubbed.Attenpastfive,⋯.Aseewitness/eyelooksaidthat⋯.Theytook2billiondollarsandranaway.Thepoliceareresearchingforthetworobbers.二、画蛇添足At4:50p.m.intheafternoonThebankwhichintheParkstreetwasrobbed.TwomillionsdollarsTheywillbecaughtassoonasinpossible.三、乱点鸳鸯Itwasheavyraining.Whatwasluckily,Weshouldhelpthepolicewithsearchingfortherobbers.四、缺胳膊少腿Becausetheheavyrainandclearroad,thetwoyoungmensmoothlyranaway.Thepolicearesearchingthetworobbers.五、瞻前不顾后Thetworobbersweretwoyoungman.Thetwoyoungmenwithamaskbrokeintothebank.精品学习资料可选择pdf第3页，共7页-----------------------\nThepoliceistryingtheirbesttosearchingforthetworobber.英语写作主要错误：一、单复数、人称、时态、语态和拼写We’llhelpthefarmpickcottons.Mr.Liismygoodfriend.Sheisactive.I’msorrytosayIfailinthelastexam.Hefoundthatsomethinghasstolenfromhishouse.二、中式英语要减少汉式英语，必须做到：①尽量使自己养成用英语思维进行写作的习惯，注意中西文化差异带来的不同表达方式。②平时要归纳总结、纠正汉式英语。③广泛阅读，多收听英语广播、收看电视中的英语新闻节目等。1)Myhomehasadog.2)Thoughhewasill,buthewentonworking.3)WefindthattolearnEnglishwellisdifficult.4)Ithinkshecannotswim.5)Herageisveryyoung.6)HewasmarriedwithAnnalastmonth.7)Hehasalotofstudentsgotocollege.8)LearnEnglishwellisnoteasy.9)TherearemanyteacherstaughtmeEnglish.10)IverylikeEnglish.[答案]1)→Myfamilyhasadog./Wekeepadogathome.2)→Thoughhewasill,hewentonworking./Hewasill,buthewentonworking.3)→WefinditdifficulttolearnEnglish.精品学习资料可选择pdf第4页，共7页-----------------------\n4)→Idon’tthinkshecanswim.5)→Sheisveryyoung.6)→HewasmarriedtoAnnalastmonth./HemarriedAnnalastmonth.7)→Alotofhisstudentshavegonetocollege.8)→Tolearn/LearningEnglishwellisnoteasy./It’snoteasytolearnEnglishwell.9)→ManyteachershavetaughtmeEnglish.10)→IlikeEnglishverymuch.三、标点符号书写英文句子时，不少学生常常误用标点符号。标点符号是一种变相文字，是书面语不可缺少的重要手段，同学们平时要比较英汉标点的差异，切莫等闲视之。[误]LiPingisn’toldenough,hecannotjointhearmy.[正]LiPingisn’toldenough.Hecannotjointhearmy./LiPingisn’toldenough;hecannotjointhearmy.[析]此句犯了两个或数个独立的句子用逗号断开的通病。1)MrYureads《ChinaDaily》everyday.2)Walkalongthisroad,andtakethesecondturningontheleft。3)Hisparentsrantohimandaskedwhathadhappened?4)IlikeChinese、maths、historyandEnglish.[答案]1)去掉书名号。汉语中有书名号，但英语中没有。书写报刊、书名等时，常用报刊、书名的每个单词首字母大写，且常在文中用斜体或在名称下划一横线的形式表示。2)空心圆点改为实心圆点。3)句末问号改为句号，因为此为陈述句。4)把顿号改为逗号，英语中没有顿号。四、字母大小写Hesaid,“myfatherhasgonetoParis”.五、词形变化Thecarhittedtheoldmananddrivedaway.六、选词或搭配不当Peterisawarm-heartedperson,soeverybodylikestohavefriendswithhim.精品学习资料可选择pdf第5页，共7页-----------------------\nPeterisawarm-heartedperson,soeverybodylikestomakefriendswithhim.[析]在理解英语词汇时，不能仅停留在了解其字面意义上，而应掌握内在涵义。同时要熟悉它们的习惯搭配。平时学习词汇时，要仔细思考，勤查词典，尤其要多记英语解释，弄清它们的确切意思和用法，以免造成类似错误。[巩固练习]1)Itonlyspendsus15minutestogototheparkfromthecenterofthecitybybus.2)Ihopeyoutobecomealawyer.3)MrWangforgothiswalletintheclassroomyesterday.4)Shewillrememberfirmlywhatherteachersaidanddid.5)Canyouborrowmeyourdictionary?6)ImustkeepyourwordsinmindandworkhardtoraisemyEnglish.7)Johncaughtabadcold,sohehadtoliveinhospital.8)Iwatchedafilmthisafternoon.答案1)spends→takes/→Wespend15minutesgoingtotheparkfromthecenterofthecitybybus.2)→Ihopethatyouwillbecomealawyer./Iwishyoutobecomealawyer.3)forgot→left“遗忘某物在某处”不可用forget，应用leave4)firmly→clearly汉语中可以讲“牢牢记住”，但英语中firmly却不可与remember搭配。常和remember搭配的副词有clearly，perfectly，thoroughly等5)borrow→lend6)raise→improve7)live→staylive表示“在某处居住”，病人“住院”用stay8)在英语中，看电影用see,看电视用watch七、句子缺乏连贯性连贯性是指句子无论长短，在安排上要合乎逻辑，衔接自然，使句内语义关系明确，让人一目了然。学生习作中不连贯的句子主要包括垂悬修饰语、指代不清、未用过渡性词语、非平行结构和语义不完整的分割短句等方面的错误。精品学习资料可选择pdf第6页，共7页-----------------------\n[误]MybestfriendinhighschoolwasourEnglishteacher.HernamewasGaoHui.ShetaughtusEnglishforthreeyears.[正]MybestfriendinhighschoolwasourEnglishteacher,GaoHui,whotaughtusEnglishforthreeyears.[析]原句把一个简单的思想内容各列成三个短句来表达，尽管这些句子语法正确，但不连贯，显得乏力。[巩固练习]1)RoseisinlovewithJohn,JohnisinlovewithMary.2)Tomwroteaquicknote.ItwastoNancy.Shewashisfriend.3)Speakingbeforeacrowdofpeopleforthefirsttime,mykneesshook.4)Shelikestoplaytennisandwatchingbasketballgames.5Everyuniversityhasmanyrulesandregulationsandtheymustobeyallofthem.6）Ireturnedtomyroom.Therewasanoteundermybook.ItwasfromJack.Hesaidhewasinthecitylookingforajob.Hehadn’tfoundanythingyet.[答案]1)→RoseisinlovewithJohn,butJohnisinlovewithMary.2)→TomwroteaquicknotetoNancy,hisfriend.3)→WhenIwasspeakingbeforeacrowdofpeopleforthefirsttime,mykneesshook.speaking的逻辑主语与句子主语不一致，产生“垂悬”修饰语。4)→Shelikesplayingtennisandwatchingbasketballgames.两个平行的思想toplaytennis和watchingbasketballgames用了不同的结构，破坏了句子的连贯性。5they→thestudents,代词they无指代对象。6→WhenIreturnedtomyroom,IfoundanotefromJackundermybook.Hesaidhewasinthecitylookingforajob,buthehadn’tfoundanythingyet.此段出现了一连串的短句，这些短句提供的信息量小，语义支离破碎，缺乏连贯性。精品学习资料可选择pdf第7页，共7页-----------------------