高中英语写作扩句 6页

扩句的方法在学习扩句法之前，先对学生进行五个简单句句型，并列句和复合句的专项训练，打好基础。扩句是在基本句型的基础上，添加各种修饰成分，使句子得到扩展，即根据表达的需求增加定语，状语，同位语等成分，或者举例子补充细节内容，或者添加谚语俗语等。11.WearrivedinSanya.-----WearrivedinSanya,happilyandexcitedly.(添加副词)22.Iliketomakefriendswithmyclassmates.------Iliketomakefriendswithmyclassmates,whohavethesameinterestasmine.(添加定语从句)33.Wewerehappyandreturnedhome.-------Wewerehappyandreturnedhomeafterwehadfinishedcollectingalltherubbish.(添加状语从句)44.Ilikereadingbooks.-------Ilikereadingbooks,suchasnovels,shortstories,magazinesandnewspapers.(通过举例补充细节)55.Weshouldstudyhard.--------Asweallknow,“Practicemakesperfect”.Soweshouldstudyhard.（添加谚语）66.Ioftenjoininmanyactivities.\n--------Ioftenjoininmanyactivitiesinordertocommunicatewithotherstudentsandbroadenmymind.(添加目的状语)三．具体应用试题要求：假如你是一名中学生，请以Mycolorfulschoollife为题，写一篇短文。要求100个字左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总数。要点提示：1：上课认真听讲2：课后完成作业3：经常参加体育锻炼4：去图书馆阅读I’mahighschoolstudentandIunderstandwhatI’mstudyingfor.Ihavebeenworkinghard._______________________________________________________________________________Maytherealwaysbecolorfullifearoundmyschool.学生的习作：I’mahighschoolstudentandIunderstandwhatI’m\nstudyingfor.Ihavebeenworkinghard.Ilistentotheteachercarefully.Ifinishmyhomeworkafterclass.Ioftentakeexercise.Ioftenreadintheschoollibrary.Maytherealwaysbecolorfullifearoundmyschool.点评：该学生能完整的写出各个要点，没有出现太大的语法错误，表达通顺，单词拼写无误。但是很明显字数不够，没有达到100个字左右，字数不够是很多学生面临的共同问题。其次，句子的表达过于平淡无奇，没有句式多样化和使用高级词汇，固定搭配、固定短语等使表达地道。而且，没有使用连接词，上下文的连接不够顺畅。改进方法：步骤一：列要点把要写的内容要点化，做到要点齐全。1:Listentotheteachercarefully2:finishmyhomework3:takepartinexercise4:oftenreadinthelibrary步骤二：造简单句\n充分利用五个简单句句型对各个要点进行补充，使其变成一个完整的句子。每个句子都要注意句子成分的完整性，语法是否正确，说法是否符合英语表达习惯。1:Ilistentotheteachercarefullyintheclass.2:Ifinishmyhomeworkafterclass.3:Ioftentakepartinexercisewithmyclassmates.4:Idosomereadingintheschoollibrary.步骤三：扩展句子1:IlistentotheteacherscarefullyintheclasssothatIcanunderstandwhattheteacherssay.(增加目的状语从句)2:Ifinishmyhomeworkafterclass,whichisapieceofcakeforme.（增加定语从句）3:Ioftentakepartinexercisewithmyclassmates,suchasplayingfootball,goingswimmingandplayingbadmintonetc.（举例说明）4:IoftendosomereadingintheschoollibrarywhenIhavenothingtodoafterclass.（增加时间状语从句）步骤四：润色句子\n根据高考（海南）英语作文评分细则，第五档的要求：24-25分，至少有3个复杂句，2种从句形式，语气自然，敬语得体，无中式英语，语言基本功扎实，词汇丰富。这就要求我们在谴词造句方面下工夫。“润色句子包括词语的选择与句型的运用。”比如可以用高级词汇，短语和固定搭配来替换一般词汇。增加习惯表达句式，倒装句，it当形式主语和形式宾语，非谓语动词等，使用多种句式，使其多样化。1:ItisnecessaryformetolistentotheteacherscarefullyintheclasssothatIcanunderstandwhattheteacherssay.(把第一句换成it当形式主语的用法，使句式多样化。)2:Itakehomeworkseriouslyandfinishitintime,whichisapieceofcakeforme.(增加了take…seriously和intime两个短语，是句子更加生动)3:Inordertostrengthenmybody,Ioftentakepartindifferentkindsofexerciseswithmyclassmates,suchasplayingfootall,goingswimmingandplayingbadmintonetc.（增加了inordertodosth目的状语和differentkindsof使句子的意思更完整。）4:Interestedinreadingbooks,Idevelopthehabitofgoingtothelibraryanddosomereadingonmyfavouritebooks.（使用过去分词短语当状语，再添加短语developthehabbitof…使文章增加亮点）步骤五：连句成篇\n“过渡词在文章中起着承上启下的作用，它好比一座桥梁，能将全文各句有机地联系在一起，从而使句子不再是孤立的独立的个体。”使用表示转折，并列，递进，因果关系等连词把句子连接起来，“有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑”使上下文更加通顺，逻辑性更强。I’mahighschoolstudentandIunderstandwhatI’mstudyingfor.Ihavebeenworkinghard.（原文已给）Firstofall(过渡词),itisnecessaryformetolistentotheteacherscarefullyintheclasssothatIcanunderstandwhattheteacherssay.What’smore(过渡词),Itakehomeworkseriouslyandfinishitintime,whichisapieceofcakeforme.Inaddition(过渡词),Inordertostrengthenmybody,Ioftentakepartindifferentkindsofexerciseswithmyclassmates,suchasplayingfootall,goingswimmingandplayingbadmintonetc.Finally(过渡词),Interestedinreadingbooks,Idevelopthehabitofgoingtothelibraryanddosomereadingonmyfavouritebooks.Maytherealwaysbecolorfullifearoundmyschool.（原文已给）这篇习作要点齐全，字数符合要求，措辞精美，句式多样化，上下文连贯，符合逻辑和英语表达习惯。因此在写作中，我们可以适当地使用扩句法对学生进行写作训练，提高学生的英语表达能力。