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高中英语写作讲评\nThecomputerismoreandmorewidelyused.Youngpeopleliketochatonline.Whentheyarechatting,theydon’tcareabouttheirwriting.Therehavemanywrongcharactersintheircompositions,too.Everyday,theyhavemanyhomework.Theycan’trememberthecharacters.Thegovernmenthascarriedoutanewpolicy.ItwillmakepeoplepayattentiontoChinese.ItwillhelpstudentslearnChinesewell.Wedon’thavemuchtime.It’shightimethatwetookaction.Wecandevelopourcountrybyimprovingourmothertonguefirst.Howdoyougradeit（定档）?Andwhy?homeworkshow\nASSESSMENTstructureIsthearticledividedintoparts?Doeseachparthaveatopicsentence?Ifnot,comeupwithone.contentAreallthedetailsstated?Ifnot,addthemissingdetails.Iseverythingtothepoint(切题)?LanguageDoesthewriteruseanylinkingwords?Arethereanymistakes?Ifyes,correctthem.Isthereanyadvancedvocabulary（高级词汇）?Ifyes,underlinethem.Arethereanygoodsentencepatterns（句式）?Ifyes,underlinethem.Let’simproveit:\nASSESSMENTstructureIsthearticledividedintoparts?Doeseachparthaveatopicsentence?Ifnot,comeupwithone.Let’simproveit:\ncontentAreallthedetailsstated?Ifnot,addthemissingdetails.Iseverythingtothepoint(切题)?Let’simproveit:\nLanguageDoesthewriteruseanylinkingwords?Arethereanymistakes?Ifyes,correctthem.Isthereanyadvancedvocabulary（高级词汇）?Ifyes,underlinethem.Arethereanygoodsentencepatterns（句式）?Ifyes,underlinethem.Let’simproveit:\nSummary:paragraphstopicsentencedetailstothepointadvancedvocabularysentencepatternslinkingwordsstructurecontentlanguagewritingfewmistakes\n目前，不少年轻人在写作中喜欢使用网络语言。某英语杂志社就此话题邀请中学生发表看法。请你参考所给要点，写一篇英语短文。有的同学认为：幽默；时尚；好玩有的同学认为：有错别字，不利于语文学习；有时难以理解你的看法：……Nowadays,manyteenagersliketousetheweblanguageintheirwriting.Somestudentsthinkitishumorousandcool.Theyusetheweblanguage.Theyfeelit’sfun.Somethinkitisdifficult.Theycannotunderstand.Whentheyarechattingonline,theydon’tcareabouttheirwriting.Therehavesomewrongly-writtencharacters.ItisbadforChineselearning.Ithinkwecanusetheweblanguageandwecanexpressourselvesmorefreely.Improvethecomposition.Focusontopicsentences,advancedvocabulary&patternsandlinkingwords.\nYoucannotteachamananything;youcanonlyhelphimfinditwithinhimself.---GalileoGalilei\nHomeworkFurtherimprovethewritingaccordingtotheassessmentform.Makeyourfinalcopyasneataspossible.\nLet’sdivideitintoparts:Part.1Part.2Part.3Thecomputer…rememberthecharacters.Thegovernment…helpstudentslearnChinesewell.It’shightimethatwe…byimprovingourmothertonguefirst.\nPart2:Todealwiththesituation,thegovernmentcarryoutanewpolicy.Part3:AsfarasIamconcerned,it’shightimethatwetookaction.Part1:Itiscommonthattherearemanywrongly-writtencharactersinastudent’scomposition.Comeupwiththetopicsentences:Atopicsentencetellsthereaderwhatacertainpartisabout.\nTopicsentenceforPart2TopicsentenceforPart3…TopicsentenceforPart1computerhomeworkraisetheawarenessofhaveapositiveeffecton\nWhichendingdoyoulikebest?Why?Inmyopinion,thepolicyisbeneficialtous.Itmakessenseinprotectingourculture.b)AsfarasIamconcerned,it’shightimethatwetookaction.Weshouldcollectthemistakesandreviewthemfrequently.Onlybyhardworkingcanweachieveourgoal.\n…theydon’tcareabouttheirwriting.Therehavemanywrongcharactersintheircompositions,too.Everyday,theyhavemanyhomework.writingaremuch\n…________.________,whenyoungpeoplechatonline,theyattachlittleimportancetotheirwriting.__________,withsomuchhomeworktodo,theyhavetroublememorizingthecharacters.Thenewpolicyisintendedtodealwiththesituation.Raisingthesocialawarenessofourmothertongue,itwillhaveapositiveeffectonChineselearning.__________,it’shightimethatwetookaction.__________,weshouldrefertoadictionaryforunknowncharacters.Second,collectthemistakesandreviewthemfrequently.Inaword,onlybyworkinghardcanweachieveourgoal.Thereareseveralreasonsbehind.B.AsfarasIamconcernedC.ForexampleD.Moreover.E.FirstofallACDBE\nWhentheyarechatting,theydon’tcaretheirwriting.Everyday,theyhavemuchhomework.Theyaretoobusytorememberthecharacters.Itwillmakepeoplepayattentiontoourmothertongue.ItwillhelpstudentslearnChinesewell.Canyouimprovethem?\nWhentheyarechatting,theydon’tcaretheirwriting.Whenchatting,theydon’tcaretheirwriting.(Ellipsis省略句)\nEveryday,theyhavemuchhomework.Theycan’trememberthecharacters.Theyhavesomuchhomeworktodothattheyfailtorememberthecharacters.(so…that;failtodo)withWithsomuchhomeworktodo,theyhavetroubleinrememberingthecharacters.\nItwillmakepeoplepayattentiontoourmothertongue.raisetheawarenessofItwillraisetheawarenessofourmothertongue.\nItwillhelpstudentslearnChinesewell.haveapositiveeffectonItwillhaveapositiveeffectonstudents’Chineselearning.\nItwillraisetheawarenessofourmothertongue.Itwillhaveapositiveeffectonstudents’Chineselearning._______theawarenessofourmothertongue,itwillhaveapositiveeffectonChineselearning.(non-verbal非谓语）(notonly…butalso)Itwillnotonlyraisetheawarenessofourmothertongue,butalsohaveapositiveeffectonstudents’Chineselearning.Raising\nItiscommonthattherearemanywrongly-writtencharactersinastudent’scomposition.Thereareseveralreasonsbehind.Forexample,whenchattingonline,teenagersattachlittleimportancetotheirwriting.Moreover,withsomuchhomeworktodo,theyhavetroublememorizingthecharacters.Todealwiththesituation,thegovernmentcarryoutanewpolicy.Raisingthesocialawarenessofourmothertongue,itwillhaveapositiveeffectonChineselearning.AsfarasIamconcerned,it’shightimethatwetookaction.Weshouldcollectthemistakesandreviewthemfrequently.Inaword,onlybyworkinghardcanweachieveourgoal.\nThankyou