攻克英语半壁江山 满分作文技巧鉴赏之二 从全国历届英语高考满分作文中获益 19页

攻克英语半壁江山 英语满分作文技巧鉴赏之二 ‎ 从全国历届英语高考满分作文中获益（2010年）‎ ‎　　（作文题目）‎ ‎　　假设你是李华，你的英国笔友Bob将于九月到你所在城市的建新华文学校学中文，来信请你在学校附近为他找一套住房。请根据图画提供的信息，写信介绍住房的情况，并告知住房面积为25平方米，月租500元。‎ ‎　　注意：1.词数：100左右：‎ ‎　　2.参考词汇：房租—Tent(n.).‎ ‎　　作文1：‎ I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin‎ Chinese ‎School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese‎ ‎School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per ‎ month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.‎ ‎　　Hope you will come here soon!‎ ‎　　All the best!‎ ‎　　Yours,‎ ‎　　Li Hua ‎　　（满分理由）‎ ‎　　本文格式正确，意思表述完整，行文流畅自然。作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用，还使用了以‘which，’引导的非限定性定语从句，从而使文章层次分明，富于变化，不愧为考场佳作。‎ ‎　　‎ 作文2：‎ Dear Bob,‎ ‎　　Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.‎ ‎　　I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin‎ Chinese ‎School. It is on the third floor and there’re ‎ three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.‎ ‎　　Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11 bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the airport, 　　see you.‎ ‎　　Best wishes !‎ ‎　　Yours,‎ ‎　　Li Hua ‎　　（满分理由）‎ ‎　　本文格式正确，内容完整，表述清楚，衔接紧密流畅，时态语态使用准确，特别是结尾末段适度的发挥，既充实了内容，又符合逻辑，成为本文与众不同的亮点。‎ ‎　　作文3：‎ Dear Bob,‎ ‎　　How are you these days?‎ ‎　　I’m so glad to know that you’ll come to our city to learn ‎ Chinese. You asked me to find a place for you. Now I’ve found one which I think is pretty good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It’s just one stop away from Jianxin‎ Chinese ‎School.‎ ‎　　There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you’ll like it. If not, I’ll try to find another place for you.‎ ‎　　Yours,‎ ‎　　Li Hua ‎　　（满分理由）‎ ‎　　本文内在逻辑性很强，由远及近。由外及内，层次分明，错落有致。同时让步状语从句运用得恰到好处，很出彩，再则结构完整，从开头的问候语到结尾都很完备。‎ ‎　　作文4： ‎ ‎　　Dear Bob,‎ ‎　　I’m glad to hear from you.‎ ‎　　Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you.‎ ‎　　The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin‎ Chinese ‎School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.‎ ‎　　It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.‎ ‎　　Will you be satisfied with this flat, or you want another one? Just let me know. I’ll try my best to help you.‎ ‎　　Yours,‎ ‎　　Li Hua ‎　　（满分理由）‎ ‎　　本文内容详实，描述具体细腻，用词适当准确，如“suitable house”、“not far from’’等，另外文中的选择疑问09高考英语满分作文 ‎　　 ‎ ‎（全国卷I海南、宁夏）‎ ‎　　【试题回放】假定你是李华，正在英国接受英语培训，住在一户英国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你准备外出，请给Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条，内容包括：‎ ‎　　1.外出购物 ‎　　2.替房东还书 ‎　　3.Tracy 来电话留言：1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)见面取消 ‎　　2)此事已告知Susan ‎　　3) 尽快回电 ‎　　注意：1. 词数100左右;‎ ‎　　2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎　　Mrs. Wilson,‎ ‎　　I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but ‎ said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.‎ ‎　　Yours,‎ ‎　　Li Hua ‎　　[名师点评]‎ ‎　　本文属于提纲式要点作文，是学生比较熟悉的题材，体现了英语学习应该注意实用性，生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确，各个要点间逻辑连贯，行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译，而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句，因此要仔细组织语言，合理安排结构。在语言方面，要特别注意简洁明了，开头要开门见山。‎ ‎(北京卷)‎ ‎　　【试题回放】情景作文 ‎　　假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。‎ ‎　　注意：词数不少于60‎ ‎　　提示词：郊区 suburbs ‎　　April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.‎ ‎　　【名师点评】‎ ‎　　本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文，与环保结合，立意较好。文章思路清晰，要点连贯，在语言的表达上选词新颖，同时运用了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达。‎ ‎　　‎ ‎(江苏卷)‎ ‎　　　注意：‎ ‎　　1.对所给要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。‎ ‎　　2.词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计人总词数。‎ ‎　　3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。‎ ‎　　The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.‎ ‎　　For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.‎ ‎　　A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.‎ ‎　　‎ ‎【名师点评】本文为提纲式说明文体裁，所选内容与我们生活相关，考生只要把所给要点逐条陈述，适度发挥，不要逐条翻译即可。文章说理清楚，语言流畅，句式表达多样，用词恰当、准确。不失为一篇满分作。‎ ‎（全国卷I）‎ ‎【试题回放】 　　假设你是李华，你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人“学中文，唱中文歌”才艺大赛。你的美国朋友Peter正在北京一所大学学中文，你觉得他应去试一试。请按以下要点给他写信告知此事，并表示可以提供帮助。‎ 比赛时间：7 月18日 。报名时间：截止到6月30日。报名地点：北京电视台 注意：1.词数：100左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯 3.参考词汇：才艺大赛-talent show Dear Peter,‎ I read in a newspaper today that a “Learn Chinese, Sing Chinese Songs” Foreigners’ Talent Show will be held in Beijing Television Station on July 18. I know you like singing, and you are in Beijing during that period. I think this is a good chance for you to show your singing talent,‎ ‎ and how well you’ve learned Chinese. If you would like to try, you' U have to go to the TV station to sign up before the end of June. If there is anything I can do for you, I would be more than glad to help. From joozone.com.　Yours, ‎ Li Hua ‎　　[名师点评]‎ 从整体上说，本文书写得简洁明快。语言简单平实，要点囊括齐全，结构完整。本文的主要特点是让步状语从句的使用，最后两句话，采用了if引导的让步状语从句，结合将来时使用。‎ ‎（全国卷II）‎ ‎【试题回放】‎ 假设你是李华，加拿大一所学校将于今年暑假组织学生来你校访问。其间，Andy Smith将借住你家。请你代表全家写信给Andy，欢迎他的到来，并告知有关事宜。信的要点如下：‎ ‎1.上午：学校活动 ‎2.下午：游览市区 ‎3. 晚上：看电视，玩游戏，聊天 注意：1. 词数：100左右2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯3. 参考词汇：安排arrange Dear Andy,‎ I’m so glad that you’ll be here with me and my family for the summer holiday. I’m writing to express our warm welcome and introduce the activities during your stay here.‎ In the morning ,some activities at school will be arranged. You’ll visit our classrooms, reading rooms, labs, and so on. We’ll take this opportunity to exchange our views, talking about school life, and so on.‎ In the afternoon, you can tour around the city. And I’ll act as your tour guide. Our city has changed a lot and takes on a new look. You can see what is our city like with your own eyes.‎ At night , we can watch TV, play games and talk about what we’re interested in. I’m sure you’ll enjoy yourself. I’m looking forward to your coming.‎ Yours sincerely,‎ Li hua ‎[名师点评]‎ 本文行文自然流畅，文章要点齐全，意思表达真切。详略得当，重点突出。从语言使用的角度来说，不但使用了一些生动的动词，准确的名词，同时为了使本文串联自然，又使用了时间状语为连接词，将文章按照时间顺序叙述完整。‎ ‎（浙江卷）‎ ‎【试题回放】‎ 假设你是李越,你的加拿大笔友Steve来信说,他和他的一些同学正在学中文,请你推荐两本学中文的词典.根据下表提供的信息,请你给他写一封回信.‎ 英汉/汉英词典新华字典 收词（字）18,000（英语） 20,000（汉语）10,000‎ 价格52元11元 特点大量例子、用法说明,适合初学者中国最常用的汉语字典 参考词汇:‎ ‎· 推荐 recommend （V.）‎ ‎　· 英汉/汉英词典 The English-Chinese Chinese-English Dictionary （ECCED）‎ ‎　· 新华字典 Xinhua Dictionary （XD）‎ ‎　Dear Steve,‎ ‎　I’m so pleased to learn that you and your classmates are learning Chinese.‎ ‎　I’d like to recommend the following two dictionaries.‎ The English-Chinese/Chinese-English Dictionary is really a good one for beginners. It has 18,000 English words and 20,000 Chinese words. Besides plenty of examples, it has many notes telling you bow to use a word. Xinhua dictionary is the most popular Chinese dictionary , and it has a vocabulary of 10,000 words. It may also be useful to some advanced learners of Chinese. Of the two, ECCED is the more expensive, costing 52 yuan, and XD costs 11 yuan.‎ Please let me know if you want me to buy these dictionaries.‎ Yours,‎ Li Yue ‎[名师点评]‎ 本文要完成的是书信的主要部分，因此不需要注意格式，但是不能遗漏要点。本文要点齐全，内容完整，详略得到。介绍的时候，层次清晰，逐一举例。文章流畅而连贯。有很多关于词汇和字典的表述，值得我们积累。‎ ‎（广东卷）‎ ‎【试题回放】假设你是下图的李华。请根据图画所提供的信息，写一篇英语作文，描述昨天晚上邻居看足球赛影响你学习的情况，并描写你随后与邻居交涉的过程（如：你向邻居提出要求，对方向你表示歉意等。）‎ 请严格按照作文地带所给要求写作：‎ ‎1. 词数：80-120‎ ‎2. 可以编写对话或其它叙述方式描写你与邻居的交涉过程.‎ About 9 o'clock last night, I was doing my homework. Suddenly I heard my neighbor shouting and laughing loudly. He was watching a football game on TV. I couldn't go on studying and became impatient. I covered my ears, trying to keep the noises out, but failed. So I had to go my neighbor.‎ I knocked at his door and said," Good evening, Mr. Yang! Could you please turn down your TV a bit? I am doing my homework.'‎ ‎“Oh, I'm really sorry to have disturbed you. We'll do as you say.” My neighbor said politely.‎ ‎　“Thank you very much..” I said and went back to continue my study.‎ ‎[名师点评]‎ 这篇文章从整体上来看，内容完整，要点齐全。在准确领悟题意的基础上，用平实的语言，将文章娓娓道来，连贯而流畅。句式搭配长短结合。文章对对话的描写，很生动，让人有种身临其境的感觉。‎ ‎　‎ ‎【试题回放】‎ ‎　　实现有效的沟通，建立良好的人际关系，不仅要善于言表，更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息，写一篇题为 “Being a Good Listener” 的英文演讲稿。‎ ‎　　注意：‎ ‎　　1、对所给要点，逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。‎ ‎　　2、词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。‎ ‎　　3、演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。‎ ‎　　Good afternoon, everyone.‎ ‎　　The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.‎ ‎　　Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.‎ ‎　　Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.‎ ‎　　What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.‎ ‎　　Thank you for your listening!‎ ‎　　【名师点评】‎ ‎　　这是一篇感情真挚、热情洋溢的演讲稿，文中大量运用排比句型，不但准确流畅地表达出题目中所提供的信息，而且体现出作者熟练运用英语的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同结构的复合句式，将倾听的对象及其作用阐述得淋漓尽致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句议论应如何倾听，则更进一步地增强了这篇演说稿的说服力。‎ 佳品传奇.美文欣赏（辑）‎