高考英语二轮复习书面表达复习专题09科技发明话题指导 12页

‎2013届高考英语二轮复习书面表达复习专题09 科技发明话题指导 实例指导1—介绍产品 ‎【写作任务】‎ 请你根据以下信息提示，介绍一款时尚手机。词数120一lS0左右。‎ ‎1．作为高科技产品使用；这款手机在国内外被广泛地使用。‎ ‎ 2．主要功能：通话、发短信、上网、照相、玩游戏等。‎ ‎3．体积小，重量轻易携带：适用于各年龄段人群。‎ ‎ (包括产品的产地，原料、性能、特征、功能，实用性、质量、价格，也可能含有副作用等)达到促销的目的，即卖出产品。怎样才能把产品广告写得吸引人，让人一看就对产品感兴趣呢?‎ 下面我就来教你产品推销广告的五步写法，打造产品推销广告吧。‎ ‎ 第一步： 开头一定要有吸引力和诱惑力，能一下子吸引消费者的注意力，好的开头是作文成功的关键(此类作文有时有题目，如：Abrief IntroductiontO HaierGroup，有时也可以省略)。 ‎ ‎ 第二步：一旦抓住了读者的注意力，就该趁热打铁劝服他们买自己的产品。介绍产品必须要紧紧围绕开头所提出的引人之处。只说“最好”、“最新”是没什么实际意义的。应该强调特性、质量、原材料，以及和同类产品相比最出彩的地方。‎ ‎ 第三步： 通过产品介绍激起读者的购买欲望后，就该进一步加强读者购买的决心了。你可以详细说明并保证产品会给读者带来的好处。‎ ‎ 第四步： 到了这一步，所有的努力都指向一个目标：促使客户采取行动、购买产品。这时语气要礼貌、坚决，并提供给客户如何购买产品的指示，以方便客户购买。‎ ‎ 第五步： (这一步有时可省略) 这一步是广告作文的收尾工作。告诉读者购买产品的联系方式，如厂家地址、电话号。‎ 码、邮箱等。‎ ‎ ●词语搜索：introduce(介绍)；make(制造)；sell(销售)；best-seller(畅销品㈠athome andabroad(国内外)；popular(流行的)；convenlent(方便的)；faster(更快)；easy(容易的)；winfirstpnze(获得一等奖)；price(价钱)；reasonable(合理的)；choice(选择)；free(免费)；regard．．．as(看待)：changeandrefund(更换，退款)；buy／purchase(购买)；discount(打折)；delay(拖延)；contact(联系)‎ ‎ ●句型搜索：1etme introduce．．．(让我介绍……)；bemadein…(产于……)；be conve—‎ nlent，fasterandeasytO…(做……方便、快速和容易)；The price is half that of the ‎ same type of …(价钱是同类产品的一半)；It’s your best choice(这是你最好的选择)；use．．．for．．．free(用……免费)；be unsatisfied to your need (不能满足你的需求)；Whywait!(不要等了)；Don'tdelay!(不要犹豫)‎ ‎ ●组句成篇：串联词语：I think；first of all ; also；too；as well；besides；in addition等 ‎ 注意两点：‎ 一、外形特点 ‎ 任何一种发明物，都有其自身的外形特点。恰如其分地介绍能使读者对产品的外形有一个清晰的了解，‎ 二、主要功能 合理而准确地介绍产品功能，是写好此类作文的关键，也是文章的主体。客观而到位的介绍能让读者较为全面地掌握产品的性能。‎ 在互联网高速发展和普及的同时,"网络成瘾症"也随之出现,在青少年中表现得尤其突出,这影响了他们正常的学习、工作和家庭生活,也不利于他们的健康。请根据下面两幅图的内容,写一篇120-150词的英语短文,谈谈自己的看法和观点,并提出科学合理的处理意见和建议。‎ ‎ ‎ 参考词汇:成瘾be addicted to ‎ ‎ ‎ 分析:‎ ‎1. 仔细审题,分析写作任务。从图画和文字提示可以看出,本写作任务属于描述不良社会现象,论述自己观点的半开放型写作。题目要求结合两幅图画的内容,揭示出一个不良现象,并对此现象的影响进行详细地分析,最后还要谈谈自己对此现象的看法和观点,并提出科学合理的建议。‎ ‎2. 观察提示,挖掘有效信息。本题目的写作信息属于文字和图画提示相结合型。两幅图画揭示了"网络成瘾症"的个别"症状",图画中人物的话语也是很好的提示信息；题干中的文字叙述部分提示了重要的信息:互联网高速发展和普及；"网络成瘾症"的出现；对青少年的影响。‎ ‎ ‎ 初稿:‎ There are two pictures. One tells us that a child wants to die if his mother doesn’t allow him to surf on the Internet. The other one tells us that a boy is so addicted to the Internet that he forgets to eat. Both of them won’t listen to their parents’advice, which makes the parents worried very much. ‎ The Internet is becoming more and more popular now. Therefore, many people, especially the young, are addicted to it, which affects their studies, work and family life. It is not good for their health. ‎ To prevent this from happening again, we should take some measures to educate the young. Ask them to use the Internet in a proper way, for example, to search for useful information. On the other hand, limit their time on the Internet. Only in this way people can make full use of it to make our country develop quicker.‎ 教师点评:‎ ‎1. 初稿将题目中给出的内容比较全面地表达了出来,结构比较完整,思路也比较清晰。并且在全面描述图画内容后,正确地分析了该现象及其原因,并提出了自己的见解和建议。尽管出现了个别较为优秀的句子,如:Both of them won’t listen to their parents’advice, which makes the parents worried very much.和Therefore, many people, especially the young, are addicted to it, which affects their studies, work and family life.等。但整体来说,在词语的选择和语句的运用上存在一些缺陷。因此,该文章只能算作一般的文章,达不到优秀的水平。‎ ‎2. 初稿存在的缺陷:‎ ‎(1) 开篇无导入语,很突兀地描述出图画内容,显得不自然。‎ ‎(2) 分析"网络成瘾症"的影响时,最后一句It is not good for their health.显得与整段隔离,不够连贯。‎ ‎(3) 最后提出建议时,用了很多祈使句,句型单一且语气显得很强硬。而且,最后一句Only in this way people can make full use of it to make our country develop quicker. 应该使用倒装句式,即:Only in this way can people make full use of it to make our country develop quicker.‎ ‎ ‎ 成稿:‎ As we can see from the pictures, some children are so addicted to the Internet that they would rather die than stop surfing the Internet. Others spend all their time ‎ on the Internet and they forget all about food and rest. However, they refuse to take any other people’s advice, including their parents’. ‎ With the rapid development and popularity of the Internet, many people, especially the youth, are addicted to it, which affects their studies and work, and sometimes even destroys their family life. Worse still, it is not good for their health, mentally and physically. ‎ In my opinion, people should make full use of the Internet, searching for useful information. On the other hand, we should use it in a proper way. Don’t waste too much time on it. At the same time, teachers and parents should take measures to educate and protect the youth against the harm caused by it. ‎ ‎ ‎ Powerful sentences:‎ ‎1. The Internet is becoming increasingly popular among people, especially the youth.‎ ‎2. We should take advantage of the Internet in our daily life and school studies. ‎ ‎3. Some people are so addicted to the Internet that they can’t go without it even for a minute.‎ ‎4. As the saying goes, everything has two sides. So the Internet has both advantages and disadvantages.‎ 实例指导3—Science and Technology ‎ 初稿:‎ Human beings have had a burning desire to explore outer space for thousands of years. Meanwhile, different opinions have been formed on whether we should explore outer space.      Some people, who think exploring outer space is a sheer waste of time and money, are against it. They point out that the investment was enormous while the information we received was relatively small. However, there are also many people who have the opposite opinion. In their views, man can benefit from studying outer ‎ space. For 2. 文章不足之处在于:‎ ‎①没有真正参透主题,题目是"Do We Need Space Exploration？",所以应着重强化正面观点(自己的观点),以便突出主题——到底需不需要太空探索。而作者把文章当成了对比观点的文章了,在第二段中详细论述了这两种相反的观点,导致主题不突出。‎ ‎②结构虽然完整,但应把个人支持的观点独成一段,这样更能突出地针对问题加以论述。‎ 成稿:‎ Man has been fascinated by outer space for thousands of years. It has been almost forty years since man’s first landing on the moon.      Now, some people believe that space exploration is a sheer waste of time and money. They point out the fact that it cost billions of dollars to carry on space re-search, but little information was brought back. However, every coin has two sides. There are still a number of other people who believe that space exploration has more advantages.      In my opinion I believe that it will bring more benefits to the people. Many new products, such as weather and communication satellites, are also products of space programs, and they have benefited people all over the world. And what’s more, scientific knowledge about outer space has been acquired by mankind. ‎ Powerful sentences:‎ ‎1. It has been almost forty years since man’s first landing on the moon.‎ ‎2. They point out the fact that it cost billions of dollars to carry on space re-search, but little information was brought back.‎ ‎3. I believe that it will bring more benefits in the future, which we cannot even imagine now.‎ ‎4. That’s why several nations are trying hard to carry out their space exploration.‎ 实例指导4—On the Interne ‎【写作任务】‎ 在人 们的日常生活中，互联网起着越来越重要的作用。请根据下表所给提示，为某英文杂志社写一篇On the Internet的征文稿。 ‎ 信息 看国内外新闻、获取各种有用信息、下载学术资料等 ‎ 通讯 可以发电子邮件、打电话等 学习 创造学习机会，如上网上大学、阅读各种书籍、自学外语等。‎ 娱乐 欣赏音乐、观看体育比赛、玩棋牌游戏。‎ 生活 购物、聊天、交友等。‎ 结论 注意：‎ ‎1．征文稿必须包括表内所有信息，且行文连贯、通顺；‎ ‎2．词数：120词左右；‎ ‎3．开头已给出，不计入总词数。‎ ‎ On the Internet The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our life…‎ ‎ 【写作指导】‎ 题目要求以On the Internet为题写一篇征文稿，实际上是一篇说明文，主要介绍因特网的用途。此文可以安排一个段落，一气呵成；也可以安排两个段落，先介绍用途，最后用一两个句子进行简单地总结。由于说明文以客观介绍为主，因而以使用一般现在时为主。此文所涉及的词汇和短语有：‎ ‎ [组词成句]使用上述词汇和短语将各项要点表达出来，可以使用多种手段来避免句式单一，如定语从句、介诃短语等。还要注意某些汉语要点用英语可以有多 ‎ [组句成篇]此文要表达的并列信息较多，因而组句成文时要特别注意前后信息内容的衔接，可使用恰当的衔接词语，如meanwhile，besides，also，through，moreover，such as，last but not the least，in a word等，这样可以使信息之间的层次更清晰、更分明。‎ ‎【学生习作】‎ ‎ On the Internet The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our life. On the net, we can learn news both at home and abroad and have access to all kinds of Useful information as well.‎ Meanwhile, we can download some academic data. Besides, the Internet is also a popular means of communication, through which we can send emails and make phone calls.‎ Moreover, the Internet creates learning opportunities, such as going to net universities, reading various kinds of books and learning foreign languages by ourselves. We can enjoy music, watch sports matches and play chess or cards. Last but not the least, we can even shop on the net, chat with other people and make friends with them.‎ In a word, the Internet has made our a lot more colourful. How fantastic it is!‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ 实例指导5— 如何看待青少年上网现象 本周班会的主题是“你如何看待青少年上网现象？”假设你本人赞同青少年上网，请根据下表所列的上网益处及友情提示写一篇发言稿。词数：150左右。‎ 益处 友情提示 ‎1. 获取新闻，搜索信息； ‎ ‎2. 收发邮件； ‎ ‎3. 上网校听课，下载学习资料；‎ ‎4. 听音乐、网上购物，节省时间，丰富课余生活；‎ ‎1. 不要迷恋网络游戏；‎ ‎2. 远离不良网站；‎ ‎3. 对陌生人要保持警惕。‎ ‎5. 为工作中所需的电脑技能打下基础。‎ 分析:‎ ‎1. 本写作任务要求根据"图表"写一篇发言稿,图表中给出的只是内容要点,而不是完整表意的句子。在完成此类作文时,首先要审清题目要求,包括文字说明和图表内列出的各项信息,要明确文章的主题和观点,即"赞同青少年上网",同时还应该注意文章的体裁是发言稿,在写作过程中要注意发言稿的风格及用词的选择；其次,可根据图表中提供的要点选择适当的句式,注意论述时应该层次分明,有所侧重；随后,可用过渡句或连接词将这些句子组成一篇完整的文章；最后,检查文章的主题是否鲜明,语句衔接是否连贯,行文是否流畅,表达是否恰如其分。‎ ‎2. 根据以上分析,本文可由三部分组成:第一部分明确提出自己的观点,即赞同青少年上网；第二部分根据图表中给出的要点逐条阐述自己持赞同态度的原因(即上网的益处)；第三部分结合图表中的提示,说明上网过程中应该注意哪些事项,并对文章进行总结。‎ 初稿:‎ As we all know, the Internet is playing an important role in our daily life. Students can get a lot of new information on-line. We can send e-mails to all parts of the world. We can attend the online schools and download study materials through the Internet. We can listen to music and shop online. We can build a good foundation for our future work by improving our ability to operate computers. That’s all. Thank you!‎ As we all know, the Internet plays an important role in our lives and in my opinion, we teenagers can benefit a lot from it. We can read news from every part of the world and get useful information online. We can send e-mails to our family as well as to our friends no matter where they are. We can also study at home with a computer by attending an online school and downloading study materials. We can also listen to music and shop online, which can save us a lot of time and make our life more colorful. Finally, we can prepare for our future work well by improving our ability to operate computers.     But we shouldn’t play Internet games too much, we should keep away from ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎①Television has changed  people’s life much since it was invented. Now it has become one important part of modern life. People②enjoy themselves after hard work by watching TV. They can see some plays, some stories, some ③sports matches without going out of home, and without spending much money in buying tickets. TV programmes make people’s life  more interesting. People can ④learn much from TV, students can study by watching some educational programmes. People can see news, weather reports, programmes about science and computers. People all over the world can learn from each other and get knowledge when they are watching TV. But not all the programmes are good enough. Today, there are too much programmes about love and crime. Some students become bad because they learn from the bad people in those programmes. And watching TV usually takes too much time.  It’s not good for people’s work and study. It’s not good for their eyes, either. People all over the world are watching TV. Is watching TV a good thing or a bad one?I think it depends on people themselves. If one can choose good programmes and he doesn’t spend  too much time on TV, it can be a good thing for him. ‎ 三、点拨：‎ 文章第一句开篇点题，直接点出电视对现代人和社会的影响。简洁、明了。‎ ‎②③④ 三句用词得当，enjoy oneself = have a good time 而第③句用法类似于 women doctors 前后都用复数。‎ 文中第处，从文章整体来看略显多余。应删去，或改为题目Is Watching TV a Good Thing?都比较好。‎ 文章最后一句话回答了题目的问题，首尾呼应。‎ 四、评语：‎ 这篇文章整体表达非常不错，学生在作文时，在确定了大致的分段结构后，进一步要做的是围绕每段主题扩展成一个完整的段落。‎ 这篇文章亦是如此，作者开篇点题后分两段进行论述，然后结尾加上了结论句总结。‎ 因此在扩展主题，分段论述时，要求先把主题句的关键词还有连词确定下来。要注意：‎ ‎1、关键词定位准确 ‎2、紧扣主题词，不断展开。‎ ‎3、句式灵活多变，而不单一死板。‎ ‎4、语意完整丰富。‎ 实战演练 ‎ 假设将来有一天能让你拥有一种超能来帮助那些需要帮助的人,你希望是什么样的能力？为什么？请据此写一篇文章,向某科技英语杂志社投稿,题目自拟。(词数:120左右)‎ My Wish Computers have developed very quickly and have greatly changed our lives. Maybe one day I will be able to enter other people’s dreams and communicate with them with the help of computers. Many people who have been badly injured in accidents cannot speak, hear or move. They accept their families’ care but they cannot communicate with them. Both the patients and the families are suffering, especially the patients who are very lonely. I would enter the patients’ dreams, tell them that their families care about them and listen to the patients. Then I would go to tell their families the thoughts of the patients. It would be an honor for me to do these kinds of things. ‎ Of course, I would not enter other people’s dreams without permission, since people need to have their own personal space.‎ 网络在给我们带来方便的同时，也引发了很多问题。简要描述该漫画内容，并就此现象发表议论。词数：120－150‎ http://www.people.com.cn/GB/paper69/17239/1511131.html Just as the picture shows, Internet is like a real net, which lures lots of people into it who can not break away though attempting to. On one hand, internet makes many things possible, such as chatting whenever and wherever you like, looking up information at a high speed. On the other hand, a large number of people desert their ‎ Cellphones There are many kinds of cellphones on the market. Which one do you like best? Allow me to tell you what I think makes a good cellphone. I think cellphones, as high-tech machines, should be able to be used in many ways apart from simply calling and sending text messages. It should be easy for me to watch TV and surf the Internet with them. In this way, I could also read the latest news at home and abroad. What’s more, I want to read e-books on my cellphone at any time and in any place. I also want to be able to store music and films on my cellphone so that I can relax in my spare time. I also think it would be wonderful if cellphones could be used as cameras too. Then I could record all of the important moments in my life.‎ 最近某英文报纸举办了题为"What Do You Think of Science and Technology?"的征文活动,请你结合自己的感受,写一篇120词左右的英语短文,发表自己的看法。‎ 本期参考范文:‎ ‎    As we know, science and technology plays an important role in the development of our society. The development of science and technology goes hand in hand with the development of our society. For example, the appearance of mobile phones at the end of last century made it possible for people to contact each other anytime and anywhere. So we can say science and technology makes our life better and more colorful. However, science and technology can also do great harm to mankind if it is misused. We will never forget that during World War II, modern weapons killed millions of people. In my opinion, we should use science and technology in the right way.‎ 网络技术的进步已经成为现代科技发展的重要标志之一,网络也成为了人们工作、学习、生活和娱乐的主要手段。请以此为话题,写一篇120 -150词的英语短文,添加到自己的Web log中,举例说明网络对人们和社会的积极影响,谈谈自己的观点,以便更好地与大家交流。‎ ‎ ‎ The Internet is becoming a very important symbol of the development of science and technology in modern times, which also has a great effect on people’s work, study, life and amusement.‎