牛津上海版优质中考冲刺基础讲义3作文词句改写学生版 18页

学员编号： 年 级：初三 课 时 数： 3‎ 学员姓名： 辅导科目：英语 学科教师： 张维维 授课类型 C(作文评分标准实例)‎ C （好词好句改写）‎ T （作文提分句型 ）‎ 授课日期及时段 教学内容 一、专题知识梳理 ‎ 知识点1：‎ 评分标准：‎ 写话评分标准：作文共20分，其中内容为8分，语言为8分，组织结构分为4分。‎ ‎(一) 内容：‎ ‎8分 内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整。‎ ‎6-7分 内容基本切题，意思大致连贯，表达基本清楚，但不够完整。‎ ‎4-5分 内容不够切题，意思不够连贯，表达不够清楚，离题目要求较远。‎ ‎3分 内容基本不切题，表达不清, 但属于考场作文。‎ ‎1-2分 文不对题，表达不清，字数严重缺少。‎ 和本题目无关，但不抄本试卷上的阅读文章。‎ ‎ (二) 语言：‎ ‎① 拼写：每错扣0.5分，同一错误不重复计数。‎ ‎② 语法：同①‎ ‎③ 标点符号、大小写：每两处错误扣0.5分，但标点符号和大小写的扣分总和均不得超过一分。‎ ‎④ 语言分最多扣8分。‎ ‎(三) 词数：‎ ‎① 词数不足30词者，得分最多不得超过8分；‎ ‎② 词数不足40词者，得分最多不得超过12分；‎ ‎③ 词数不足50词者，得分最多不得超过15分；‎ ‎④ 词数在50-59词之间者，每少5个词扣0.5分；‎ ‎⑤ 只写出个别单词、词不成句不给分。‎ ‎(四) 组织结构：‎ ‎① 内容充实，不写废话；上下文连贯、用语规范、表达正确、无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表达用语者，可给4分。‎ ‎② 一般情况下，内容和语言积累得分在14-15分以上者（含），方可得到2-3分组织结构分。‎ ‎③ 内容和语言在15分以下者，如文中有值得肯定的好的句型和表达，可酌情考虑给1分组织结构分。‎ ‎④ 通篇句型、句式单一。词汇贫乏者，即使无语法错误，一般不给组织结构分。‎ 知识点2：写作步骤：‎ ‎ 1、列提纲：列提纲包括（1）审题，确定文章的体裁和篇章结构，先后顺序以及侧重点（总-分；总-分-总）；（2）选材，选择最能说明主题且自己有话可说的材料，忌眼高手低选择深奥、偏僻、复杂的材料；（3）选写作方法，如举例，因果，并列，递进，正反对比，对照，时序等。‎ ‎ 2、根据提纲写作，注意选词和句型，过渡句，衔接词。‎ ‎ 3、检查：查词汇；查句型；查要点；查文采；查拼写 训练方法：‎ ‎1、遣词：在正确的基础上选择具体的、高级的词汇。‎ ‎2、造句：使用正确的、熟练的句型。恰当使用复杂句。能恰当表意的习语、谚语。使用连接词增加文章的逻辑性和条理性。‎ ‎3、布局谋篇：主题句简洁明了，中间句丰富多彩，结束句首位呼应，提升主题。‎ 二、专题精讲 马莞懿：‎ ‎ Water is precious ‎ As we all know, water is one of the most important thing in our lives（生命可数，生活，不可数）. We can live without water because we use it to do the washing ,drinking and so on. But it isn’t enough for everyone to use. Although there is a lot of water on the Earth but 97% of the water is salty. （数据例证好！）So we must save it .First of all ,we can use water twice or more. For example, we can use the water to clean the rice and then use it to water the plants. The water after cleaning the rice has a lot of nutrition for plants. Secondly, we should turn of the tap when we don’t use. Last but not least, we shouldn’t pour the sewage into the lake. It may make the lake dirtier.（Chinglish表达尽量避免！） Water is important for every species on the earth. We mustn’t waste or pollute the water.(结尾再升华！) （151）‎ 点评：‎ 内容：结构合理，三个要点包含清楚。个别句子内容简单，需要多添加一些背景补充。-0.5‎ 语言：个别拼写，语法小错(冠词the 滥用，earth大写)。-2.5‎ 文采：+2‎ 总分：15‎ ‎ 修改满分版：‎ Water is Precious As we all know, water is one of the most important resources in our life because we not only drink and wash with it, ‎ but use it in agricultural and industrial production as well. ①（However, despite large amounts of water on the earth, only less than 3% can be used by humans, which is not enough for everyone at all. So we must save it .）②（First of all, use water twice or more. For example, we can use water after cleaning the rice to water the plants. It includes a lot of nutrition for them. Secondly, we should turn off the tap when we don’t use it. Last but not least, we shouldn’t pour the sewage into the lake, for it may dirty the lake. In all, let’s take actions to protect precious water!）③ ‎ 亮点分析：‎ ‎① 一句话点明水的重要性。用状语从句because,并列连词not only, but…as well能把零散信息整合在一起。‎ ‎② 一句话点明缺水的原因。数据例证有说服力，which非限定性定从善用给作文加分。‎ ‎③ 三个措施三个连接词，层次分明，详略得当，dirty动词（把。。。弄脏），比make…dirty这种chinglish表达好。‎ 三、专题过关 ‎ 赵凯雨原文：‎ ‎ At the moment, I smiled When it comes to the moment I smile most happily, I will certainly choose the visit to the home for the aged （The visit to the aged people’s home skips into my mind.）because I have learned a lot during the experience.‎ Last week, my classmates and I planned to pay a visit to the old. We wanted to give some performances to them. My job was to sing an old song. As a result, （是过程，不是结果）I practiced very hard every night. Though I faced some difficulty, I managed to come across them at last. The performance turned out to be a great success. (how and why?细节描写缺乏。)At the moment, I smiled proudly because I could do something to make others happy. In addition, I realized that I should always do something for the people in need.‎ To sum up, only if all the people feel happy, can I smile more often in the future.？‎ 点评：‎ 语言：语言流畅，个别小错。-0.5‎ 内容：结构合理，内容详实，但缺乏关键处细节描写，个别句子不通顺，结尾逻辑不通？ -2‎ 文采：文采飞扬 +3‎ 总分：16.5‎ ‎ 满分修改版：‎ When it comes to the moment I smile most happily, the visit to the old people’s home skips into my mind for I have learned a lot during the experience.‎ Last week, our classmates planned to give a performance to the old people. My job was to sing an old song. Before that, I practiced very hard. When I sang the song in front of the old people, they listened excitedly and clapped for me warmly. (细节描写)At the moment, I smiled proudly because I could do something to make others happy. In addition, I realized that I should always do something for the people in need.‎ How I hope to have more those smiling moments. (120)‎ 四、学法提炼 中考作文打分的三个档次和评分标准：‎ A档次的作文一般运用了较多的连接词、短语、并列、倒装、时间状语从句、被动语态，审题合理、时态使用正确；字数符合要求；没有大小写、拼写错误。得分在18-20分 B档次的作文一般审题可以，有一定的过程描述，语言较流畅，叙述基本完全；复合句；时态基本正确。得分在16-18 分 C档次的作文一般能够使用不同的句子，大小写、标点使用正确，会使用些连接词。但语言上可能还需要更加丰富饱满。得分在13-15‎ 一些存在典型错误的学生文章写作扣分往往存在部分偏题或完全偏题的情况所以正确审题很重要，内容与主题的相关度是阅卷老师衡量的主要标准。对于半开放作文要补全合适的主题（切入点要小，不能太大）；对于记叙文：时间顺序要注意；要详略得当，有重点。‎ 建议同学们平时写作文的时候可以参照下图的标准事项给自己打分。‎ 评价标准 是(1分)‎ 尚可(0.5分)‎ 否(0分)‎ 总分 字数达标 按时间顺序叙述 详略得当 语言 无中式英语 时态正确 句子成分完整 结构 开头包含四要素 结尾总结全文 合计 一、 专题知识梳理 ‎ 技巧1：形容词高级化 技巧2：动词短语化 技巧3：名词具体化 技巧4：两句2合1‎ 技巧5：主动变被动 技巧6：善用副词 技巧7：名言警句 ‎ ‎ ‎ 一、 专题精讲 技巧1：形容词高级化 勤奋的 hard-working—diligent 聪明的clever—intelligent 重要的important—essential 美丽的beautiful—attractive 开心的happy—delightful ‎ 有害的bad—be harmful to 有意义的meaningful 独立的independent 有责任的responsible 方便的convenient 有必要的necessary 技巧2：动词短语化 认为think—hold the viewpoint that 阻止 stop—prevent from doing sth 解决solve—deal with 给give—provide with 提高improve—make progress 期待expect—look forward to doing sth.‎ 尽力try—try one’s best to do 能够can—be able to do sth 满意satisfy—be satisfied with 使用use—make full use of 扮演act—play an important part in 注意focus—pay attention to doing sth 技巧3：名词具体化 ‎ 好处advantage ‎ 知识knowledge 幸福happiness 影响influence 自信心self-confidence 建议suggestion 技巧4：两句2合1‎ 时间状语从句：when, not…until, as soon as 目的状语从句：so that+clause; to do（为了）‎ 结果状语从句：so…that+clause, too…to do（太……以至于……）‎ 条件状语从句：if, unless（除非）, as long as（只要）‎ 让步状语从句：though（尽管，不与but连用）, although（尽管，不与but连用）, even though(即使), even if（即使） no matter what/when/where/who/which/how （无论…）‎ 比较：as…as…, not so…as…, than 技巧5：主动变被动 Some shop owners use Christmas songs during the festive season to make us more careless with our money. ‎ ‎=Christmas songs are used to make us more careless with our money during the festive season.‎ 技巧6：善用副词 ‎ ‎ 事实上Actually ‎ ‎ 然而However ‎ 很可能probably ‎ 几乎almost ‎ 尤其especially ‎ 立即immediately 技巧7：名言警句-专题 健康：One apple a day, keeps the doctor away.‎ ‎ 一天一苹果，医生远离我。‎ 友情：A fiend in need is a friend in deed.‎ ‎ 患难见真情。‎ 学习：Never too old to learn.‎ ‎ 活到老，学到老。‎ 毅力：Practice makes perfect.‎ ‎ 熟能生巧。‎ 方法：All roads lead to Rome.‎ ‎ 条条道路通罗马。‎ As an old saying goes, “One apple a day, keeps the doctor away.”‎ ‎ 三、专题过关 变为简单句 ‎1、I hope that I can see you soon． ‎ ‎2、He showed me how he used the computer ‎3、I don’t know what he said. ‎ ‎4、Could you tell me how I can get to the park?‎ ‎5、I found that it was easy to finish the work.‎ ‎6、It seemed that they won the match.‎ 同义句型改写 ‎1、Can you help me?‎ ‎2、The food is very delicious.‎ ‎3、It’s time for school.‎ ‎4、How do you like Shenzhen?‎ ‎5、Bob began to go to school when he was six.‎ 变并列句为复合句 Hurry up, or you will miss the early bus. ‎ 四、学法提炼 此部分要求孩子在掌握考纲词汇的基础上能够对于词汇进行拓展以增加词汇量 一、 能力培养 ‎2019年中考英语写作提高分数的 “拿分魔鬼句型” ‎ ‎(每天看2-3个句型，熟记熟默，并造句至少2句例句和在自己写过的或要写的作文中应用)‎ ‎1. ……the + 形容词最高级 + 名词 +(that)+ I have ever + seen (known/heard/had/read, etc)‎ Helen is the most beautiful girl that I have ever seen.‎ 海伦是我所看过最美丽的女孩。‎ Mr. Chang is the kindest teacher that I have ever had.‎ 张老师是我曾经遇到最仁慈的教师。‎ Yao Ming is the tallest basketball player that I have ever seen.‎ 姚明是我所见过的最高的篮球运动员 Liu Xiang is the most hardworking sportsman that I have ever seen.‎ 刘翔是我所见过的最勤奋的运动员。‎ ‎2. Nothing is + 形容词比较级 than to do sth ‎ Nothing is more important than to receive education.‎ 没有比接受教育更重要的事。‎ Nothing is more important than to protect our environment.‎ 没有什么比环保更重要的事。‎ Nothing is more important than to gain knowledge.‎ 没有什么比学习知识更重要的事。‎ ‎3. There is no denying that +句子...(不可否认的是……) deny v. 否认 There is no denying that Lin Zhiling is the most charming actress I have ever seen.‎ 不可否认是，林志玲是我所见过的最有魅力的女演员。‎ There is no denying that the qualities of our living have gone from bad to worse.‎ 不可否认是，我们的生活品质已经每况愈下。‎ ‎4. There is no doubt that + 句子…(毫无疑问的……) doubt n./v. 疑问 There is no doubt that our educational system is not perfect.‎ 毫无疑问的我们的教育制度不是完美的。‎ ‎5. An advantage of sth/doing sth is that + 句子(……的一个优点是……)‎ An advantage of keeping pets is that you will never feel lonely. ‎ 养宠物的一个优点是你不会感到寂寞。‎ An advantage of using the solar energy is that it won't create (produce) any pollution.‎ 使用太阳能的一个优点是它不会制造任何污染。‎ An advantage of taking exercises is that it can make us keep healthy.‎ 锻炼身体的优点是它可以让我们保持健康。‎ ‎6. The reason why + 句子 + is that + 句子(……的原因是……)‎ The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can provide us with fresh air.‎ ‎ 我们必须种树的原因是它们能供应我们新鲜的空气。‎ ‎7. So + 形容词 + be + 主语 + that + 句子(如此……以致于……)‎ ‎ 仔细观察：其实是so…that…的倒装结构。‎ So precious is time that we can't afford to waste it.‎ 时间是如此珍贵，它经不起我们浪费。‎ ‎= Time is so precious that we can't afford to waste it.‎ So beautiful is Xi Shi that we all like her.‎ 西施是如此美丽，以致于我们都喜欢她。‎ ‎= Xi Shi is so beautiful that we all like her.‎ ‎8. 形容词 + as + Subject(主语)+ be, …(虽然……)‎ ‎ 仔细观察：其实和although 引导的让步状语从句差不多，但有所倒装。‎ Rich as our country is, the qualities of our living are by no means satisfactory.‎ ‎(by no means = in no way = on no account 一点也不)‎ 虽然我们的国家富有，我们的生活品质绝对令人不满意。‎ ‎=Although our country is rich, …‎ ‎9. The + adj/adv的比较级+（n.） + 主谓, the + adj/adv的比较级+（n.） + 主谓 ‎ (愈……愈……)‎ The harder you work, the more progress you make.‎ 你愈努力，你愈进步。‎ The more books we read, the more learned we become.‎ 我们书读愈多，我们愈有学问。‎ ‎10. By +Ving, ~~ can ~~ (借着……，……能够……)‎ By taking exercise, we can always stay healthy. ‎ 借着做运动，我们能够始终保持健康。‎ By reading, we can broaden our horizon.‎ 通过阅读，我们可以扩大视野。‎ ‎11. sth/doing sth enable(s) + Object(宾语)+ to do主动 / to be done被动 (……使……能够……)‎ Listening to music enables us to feel relaxed.（宾语us与feel 之间是主动关系）‎ 听音乐使我们能够感觉轻松。‎ Travelling enables our life to be enriched.（宾语life与enrich之间是被动关系）‎ 旅行能丰富人们的生活。‎ Watching movies enables our horizon（视野） to be broadened.（被开阔）‎ 看电影能开阔视野。‎ 同学们再看看下面这两个例句是不是就一目了然了：‎ The light enables Damin to see better.‎ The light enables fish to be seen better.‎ ‎12. That is the reason why ~~~ (那就是……的原因)‎ ‎ Summer is hot.That is the reason why I don't like it.‎ ‎ 夏天很炎热。那就是我不喜欢它的原因。‎ ‎ Winter is cold. That is the reason why I don't like it.‎ ‎13. By no means /In no way/ On no account +can we do sth (我们绝对不能……)‎ ‎ On no account can we ignore(忽略) the value of knowledge.‎ ‎ 我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值。‎ ‎ By no mean can we ignore the importance of education.‎ ‎ 我们绝对不能忽略教育的重要性。‎ ‎14. ~~~ cannot emphasize the importance of ~~~ too much.‎ ‎ (再怎么强调...的重要性也不为过。)‎ ‎ We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much.‎ ‎ 我们再怎么强调保护眼睛的重要性也不为过。‎ ‎ We cannot emphasize the importance of education.‎ ‎ 我们再怎么强调教育的重要性也不为过。‎ ‎15. Those who ~~~ (……的人)‎ ‎ Those who break the law should be punished.‎ ‎ 违法的人应该受处罚。‎ ‎16. There is no one but ~~~ (没有人不……) 这个主语认为是第三人称单数 ‎ 例句：There is no one but wants to go to college. ‎ ‎ 没有人不渴望上大学。‎ ‎ There is no one but longs to be a millionaire. long to do sth 渴望做某事 ‎ 没有人不渴望成为百万富翁。‎ ‎17. It is obvious that + 句子 (显然的是…)‎ It is obvious that knowledge plays an important role in our life.‎ ‎ 可想而知，知识在我们的一生中扮演一个重要的角色。‎ 这种句型其实很普遍，看下书本里的这句话：‎ ‎ It is common knowledge that computers are super calculators. ‎ ‎18. be closely related to ~~ (与……息息相关)‎ ‎ Taking exercise is closely related to health.‎ ‎ 做运动与健康息息相关。‎ ‎19. get into the habit of + doing…(养成……的习惯)‎ ‎ We should get into the habit of previewing and reviewing.‎ ‎ 我们应该养成预习和复习的习惯。‎ ‎20. Due to/ Thanks to + sth/doing sth , ~~ (因为……)‎ ‎ Thanks to his encouragement, I finally realized my dream.‎ ‎ 因为他的鼓励，我终于实现我的梦想。‎ Due to Mr Wang’s help, I passed the examination.‎ 多亏汪老师的帮助，我通过了考试。‎ ‎21. What (a/an) + adj +n + 主谓!= How + adj +主谓! (多么……!)‎ ‎ 试着在作文中写一句感叹句！How和what的感叹句可以转换，请注意下面句子：‎ ‎ What an important thing it is to keep our promise!‎ ‎ How important a thing is to keep our promise!‎ ‎ 遵守诺言是多么重要的事!‎ ‎ What an important thing it is to be honest!‎ ‎ How important a thing is to be honest!‎ ‎ 诚实是多么重要的事!‎ ‎22. have a great influence on ~~ (对……有很大的影响)‎ ‎ Smoking has a great influence on our health.‎ ‎ 抽烟对我们的健康有很大的影响。‎ ‎23. do good to (对...有益)，do harm to (对……有害)‎ ‎ Reading does good to our mind. 读书对心灵有益。‎ ‎ Overwork does harm to health. 工作过度对健康有害。‎ ‎24. Spare no effort to + V (不遗余力的)‎ We should spare no effort to beautify our environment.‎ 我们应该不遗余力的美化我们的环境。‎ ‎25. Since + Subject(主语) + 一般过去式，Subject(主语) + 现在完成式。‎ ‎ Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.‎ ‎ 自从他上高中，他一直很用功。‎ ‎26. For the past + 时间，Subject(主语) + 现在完成式...(过去……年来，……一直……)‎ ‎ For the past two years, I have been busy preparing for the examination.‎ ‎ 过去两年来，我一直忙着准备考试。‎ ‎27. do one's utmost to do… = try one's best to do…(尽全力去……)‎ ‎ We should do our utmost to achieve our goal in life.‎ ‎ 我们应尽全力去达成我们的人生目标。‎ ‎ We should try our best to help others.‎ ‎ 我们应尽全力帮助别人。‎ ‎28. Among various kinds of …，… ‎ ‎ =Of all the kinds of…， … (在各种…之中, …)‎ ‎ Among various kinds of sports/Of all the kinds of animals, I like jogging in particular.‎ ‎ 在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。‎ ‎ ‎ ‎29. Of all the +n. + 主谓，…（I know/have learned/have read/have raised/am interested in…）， (在我所…的所有…中，…)‎ Of all the people I know， perhaps non deserves my respect more than Mrs Shen, my class teacher.‎ 在我认识的人当中也许没有一个人比我班主任沈老师更值得我尊敬。‎ Of all the books I have read, I like Greek myths best ‎30. In my opinion， …‎ ‎ = In my view， …‎ ‎ = As far as I am concerned， …‎ ‎ 就我的看法…;我认为…‎ ‎ In my opinion, playing computer games not only takes much time but also is harmful to health.‎ ‎ 就我的看法玩电脑游戏既花费时间也有害健康。‎ ‎31. 据说… It is said (that)子句 ‎ 一般认为… It is thought (that)子句 ‎ 大家都知道… It is known (that)子句 ‎ 据报导… It is reported (that)子句 ‎ 一般预料… It is expected (that)子句 ‎ 据估计… It is estimated (that)子句 ‎ 一般相信… It is believed (that)子句 ‎ It's known that Hangzhou is a beautiful city.‎ 众所周知杭州是座美丽的城市。‎ ‎32. 同学们背的名言警句开头是这样的：（看好标点，千万别出错）‎ A famous saying (谚语)goes, “ 名言 .”‎ A proverb (谚语)says, “ 名言 .”‎ A famous saying goes, “Failure is the mother of success.”‎ 二、能力检测 句子改写训练 ‎1. She noticed the beautiful dress on the shelf.（使用物作主语，升级动词）‎ ‎2. In the past twenty years, he has collected many stamps.（改用名词短语）‎ ‎3. The couple have three children, so they can’t spend all the family’s money to start a shop.（使用with复合结构，使用it作形式主语的句型）‎ ‎4. It’s important for us to get happiness from reading.（使用主语从句，并升级动词）‎ ‎5. Munro was born in a farmer family in Ontario. Munro did a lot of physical work as a young girl.（用分词作状语）‎ ‎6. He don’t have money, so he can't pay for the flat and has to live on the street.（使用with复合结构） ‎ 7. Tom is so clever that he can understand the main idea of the text easily. （进行词汇升级）‎ ‎8. When we face an exam, EQ helps us to manage our feelings.（使用状语从句简化）‎ ‎9. More and more people want to have their own private cars.（优化more and more）‎ ‎10. There are a lot of foggy days in many cities in China.（使用see表示“见证”的用法）‎ ‎11. In the countries all over the world, many people are leaving the countryside to find jobs in the cities.（表达优化，引入非谓语动词）‎ 三、能力点评 句子改写需要学生在掌握基础的句子结构和句型的情况下的拓展练习，以此来增加作文的文采，需要在平时不停地练习；‎ ‎ ‎ 学法总结 1. 知识收获 基础单词的改写和提分句型的掌握能够丰富作文句式，提高写作水平；‎ ‎2. 方法总结 对于课文和平时遇到的好词好句可以摘抄到错题本，并且多读多练习；‎ ‎3. 技巧提炼 此部分由老师引领学生进行总结。（参考方法总结，让学生自己提炼做题技巧）‎ 课后作业 ‎ Homework :‎ ‎ 基础版---1.奉贤区初三期中英语考试 ‎ Writing (作文): (共20分) ‎ ‎94. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation.(根据情景写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)‎ Situation: In Yulin, Guangxi, a dog meat-eating festival is held in summer every year. Tens of thousands of ‎ dogs are killed and cooked during the festival. Do you support the Yulin tradition that has lasted for ‎ hundreds of years, or do you believe this custom should be stopped? What is your opinion? Why?‎ ‎(注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分 My Opinion on a Dog Meat-eating Festival (原文)‎ ‎ There is no denying that china has many traditional customs, but are they all true or do good to people’s physical or spirit health? From my point of view, the Yulin tradition of dog meat-eating festival should be stopped. The reasons are as follows:‎ ‎ First of all, dogs are human’s friends. They can also help people do a lot of things. Such as accompanying the old, guarding our houses. Even guarding dogs can help people crossing the road. What’s more, dogs are honorable animals, so we should treat dogs as our best friends, even families. We shouldn’t be cruel to them.‎ ‎ As dogs are so good to people, why don’t we stop the foolish custom?!‎ My Opinion on a Dog Meat-eating Festival （修改版）‎ ‎ There is no denying that china has many traditional customs, but are they all true or do they do good to people’s physical or spirit health? From my point of view, the Yulin tradition of dog meat-eating festival should be stopped. The reasons are as follows:‎ ‎ First of all, dogs are human’s friends. They can also help people do a lot of things, such as accompanying the old, guarding our houses. Even guarding dogs can help people cross the road. What’s more, dogs are honorable animals, so we should treat dogs as our best friends, even families. We shouldn’t be cruel to them.‎ ‎ As dogs are so useful to people, why don’t we stop the foolish custom?‎ ‎2. 金山区2019-2019学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷 Writing(作文)：（共20分）‎ Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “One problem /question I met in my English study”. according to the situation given (请根据所给情形，以“我在英语学习中碰到的一个问题”为题，写一篇不少于60个字的短文。要求内容切题、语言地道、表达流畅)‎ 情境：‎ 每个人在自己的英语学习过程中总会碰到这样那样的问题。你碰到过怎样的问题？你解决了 这个问题吗？如果解决了，你认为你的解决方案怎么样？如果没有解决，你认为是什么原因？以后会用什么更好的方法？‎ 以下词或词组供参考 can(not), understand, (don’t) know, read…correctly, remember, write, ask ‎(注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分)‎ 范文一： One problem I met in my English study When I was in grade 8, I realized I really have to work on my English. Though my writing is strong, my listening is weak. I can’t understand what they say.‎ To improve my English, I established a plan. First of all, I increased my vocabulary amount by remembering 20 words each day and really understand them. Second, I read at least one English passage correctly everyday to improve my reading skill because reading and listening are closely related. For increasing my listening better, I went to the English Corner after school and practiced with native speakers. ‎ With the plan, I increased my English skill very fast. But I still ask my teacher the knowledge point that I don’t know. Learning English needs to insist on. ‎ 范文二： One problem I met in my English study I don't understand English well. And many times when I want to speak English, I can't get the proper word. My speaking is weak.‎ ‎ To solve this problem, I made every effort to grasp a great amount of new words. Because the word is the most basic element to constitute the sentences and articles. Secondly, improving my spoken English is vital as well. My English teacher asked us to speak English as much as possible. So I communicated with my roommates in English in our daily life.‎ With time goes by, I can communicate with native speakers fluently. No matter what you do, if you can stick to the end, victory belongs to you, including learning English. ‎ 提高版 -----‎ ‎1.13年宝山区二模 Write at least 60 words about the topic “What’s Your View on Setting off Firecrackers?”. （以“你对燃放爆竹的看法”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)‎ Use the following points as a reference. （以下问题仅供参考）‎ ‎1) Do you usually set off firecrackers during the Spring Festival? What about last Spring Festival?‎ ‎2) How do you like this Chinese traditional custom?‎ ‎3) Do you think it is good or not? Why or why not?‎ ‎（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）‎ ‎ ‎ 范文:‎ People’s attitudes towards setting off firecrackers differ greatly from person to person. Some strongly think it a good way to celebrate the Spring Festival, while others are fully convinced it should be banned. As far as I’m concerned, I agree with the latter view. On one hand, not only can it pollute environment but also it can do harm to people’s eyes and ears, injure or disable people and even kill them. On the other hand, people who still work in holidays won’t get enough sleep due to its noise. To sum up, setting off fireworks ought to be banned especially in holidays.‎ ‎ ‎ ‎2. 13年松江区二模 Write a passage in at least 60 words according to the given situation (根据所给情景写一段不少于60词的短文，标点符号不占格。)‎ In March, 2019, it was reported that thousands of dead pigs were seen floating on the Huangpu River in Shanghai. What do you think of it? How should we develop our good habits to protect the environment? (今年3月，上海黄浦江上漂浮着许多死猪。你是如何看待这种现象的？我们应该如何养成习惯去保护环境？至少举1-2个例子)‎ ‎（注意：文中不得出现任何姓名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）‎ 范文：‎ Thousands of dead pigs, through China’s Huangpu River, floated toward the nation's major business center at Shanghai. The greater concern is that the pigs may have died of a kind of dangerous virus which maybe harmful to people’s health. Most people think that it is our human being who is the real trouble maker. I do agree with it. To solve this problem, we should develop our habits to protect the environment. For example, the pig farms should find methods to deal with the dead pigs instead of throwing them away without concern. Another useful way is that our government should take actions to help and guide these pig farms to make sure our citizens’ health. If all the people around can make a joint effort, our world will be more and more beautiful.‎