高考英语二轮复习书面表达复习专题11青少年成长话题指导 10页

实例指导1—青少年秘密2013届高考英语二轮复习书面表达复习专题11 青少年成长话题指导 ‎【写作任务】‎ ‎ 青少年也有很多属于自己的小秘密。家长们应允许他们保留一些私人空间。请根据下表写——篇短文，指出家长的一些错误做法，并给这样的家长提一些建议，使家长和孩子更好的交流。词数：120--150。‎ ‎ 【思路指导】 ‎ ‎1．思路点拨：‎ ‎ 审题第—步：确定文体、人称，这是一篇说理议论文，应以第三人称为主；‎ ‎ 审题第二步：确定全文论点。从信息提示来看，全文的中心应是批评家长的这些错误做法并且给这样的家长提建议；‎ ‎ 审题第三步：确定写作要点。‎ ‎ 2．选词、造句：‎ ‎ ①交流产生困难 ‎ have some difficulty in communicating ‎ ‎ ②偷看孩子日记 ‎ peep at their children's diaries ‎ ③不敲门就进入孩子房间 ‎ ‎ walk into their children's rooms without knocking ‎ ④私自查看孩子书包 ‎ ‎ look through children's schoolbags without permission ‎ ‎ ⑤看别人写给孩子的信件 ‎ read letters sent to their children ‎ ⑥家长应明白：他们不再是小孩子了。‎ ‎ Parents should know they are no longer little girls or boys．‎ ‎ ⑦为了更好地了解他们，父母应设身处地为孩子们着想。‎ ‎ To learn more about their children，parents should remember what they did at the same age．‎ ‎ ⑧更重要的是，家长还要尊重和理解孩子。‎ ‎ The more important thing is that parents should give them enough respect and understanding．‎ ‎ 【参考范文】‎ ‎ Now some parents have some difficulty in communicating with their children． ‎ Children can't understand what their parents have done．Some parents peep at their children's diaries：some walk into their children's rooms without knocking；some：look through their schoolbags without permission：others read letters sent to their children．Are these really good ideas? We are afraid not．Parents should know they ale no longer little ‎ To learn more about：their children，parents should remember what they did at the same age．And the most：important：thing is that： parents should give them respect ；and understanding．‎ 实例指导2—独生子女 ‎ ‎ ‎【写作任务】‎ 自从我国实行一对夫妇只生一个孩子的计划育政策以来，很多家庭都是独生子女，孩子娇生养，在家吃啥有啥，穿啥买啥而且都是名牌。请写一篇120—150词的英语短文来阐述一下一对夫只生一个孩子的利与弊、‎ ‎ 【思路指导】‎ ‎ 这是一篇开放性作文：这类作文的特点是只出主题，或两三点提示，或一段素材，然后由考在此基础上充分发挥想象力， 自由创作。开放性作文对考生的能力要求更高，考查也全面。它不仅查考生的书面语言表达能力、语言组织能力，而考查考生的逻辑思维能力、发散思维能力、丰富想象力，以及多角度考虑问题的创新思维能力。与控制性作文相比，开放性作文不仅扩大了命题的写作的范围，提高了考生的写作兴趣，而且把对考生的考查提高到更高、更新的层面上来。因此开放作文给学生提供了更广的写作空间，有利于培养学生的创新意识，同时也要求考生必须要思维活跃开善于发散思维，近几年此题型常考的文体有两种：记叙文和议论文。记叙丈就是要求考生根据给的材料，展．开充分的想象，拓展原材料，把整个事情表达清楚。而议论文要求考生对所给的材料进行分析，然后发表自己的观点或看法。‎ ‎ 突破开放性作文的方法如下：‎ 子有利有弊。第二部分：分别介绍一对夫妇只生一个孩子的利与弊，我们可从以下几个方面来考虑：①一对夫女；只生一个孩子有利于父母更好地关心照顾孩子，为孩子提供有质量的服务，然而父母这样做要把握好度，过度的话就会对孩子溺爱。②减轻了他们的经济负担，另外，一对夫妇只生一个孩子容易造成孩子的孤独和不能很好的跟别人吏往等问题。③总结再次阐明自己的观点，做到首尾呼应。‎ ‎ 最后，要注意合理地分段，注意标点符号的应用、语言要流畅，上下丈过渡 【教师点评】‎ ‎ 文章的亮点在于：‎ ‎ 1．恰当使用过渡词：For one thing …for another，therefore，however，What’s worse等的使用使语意连贯，衔接自然。‎ ‎ 2．表达自己观点时用到了personally , I hold the view that …被动句single children may be more spoiled，原因状语从句、定语从句、动名词复合结构以及1eave+宾语+宾语补足语leave the child less able m interact well with people of his or her own age.等的应用在一定程度上体现作者较为深厚的语言功底，同时又十分自然。‎ ‎ 但文章也存在不足之处：‎ ‎ 1．有明显的语法错误，如：第二段中的非限制性定语从句which make them more dependent on their parents.中的make应改为makes，因为which代替的是前面的整个情况。又如：第三段开头句子there seems to have some other problems这是there be句型的变型，所以have应改为be。‎ ‎2．文章结束得太突然，使读者读起来感觉好像后面还有内容，最好再做个总结。‎ 实例指导3－交友 ‎ ‎ ‎【写作任务】‎ 假设你叫王华，你的笔友李君来信询问关于如何交友的问题。请根据下面的汉语提示， 结合自身实际，给他写一封回信。内容包括： 1. 交友的重要性； 2. 如何交友：至少提三条建议； 3. 患难朋友才是真朋友。 词数要求：120-150。 ‎ ‎【思路指导】‎ ‎1. 仔细审题：在历年高考中，英语试题中的书面表达题考查最多的应用文为书信形式。而内容有很多又是关于很多疑惑问题的请教或解答。本文写作的中心是围绕“如何交友”这个主题来展开，属于议论文范畴，所以应该使用一般现在时态来表述观点，人称上应以第一人称为主。‎ ‎2. 提炼要点：‎ 实际上，本篇习作的要点主要体现在在如何交友上，为此你要通过具体的建议进行说明你的想法和建议。通过对作文要点的分析，更有利于我们设计文章的整体结构。‎ ‎3. 理清层次：‎ 由于是说理性文章，脉络一定要清晰，使人一幕了然，说服性强。为了保证层次间在意义上的连贯以及自然的过渡，适量衔接词的使用在本文的写作中是必不可少的。‎ ‎4. 谋篇布局：‎ 由于本文属于一篇带有劝勉性质的说理性文章，因此要用过渡词将上下文的逻辑关系体现出来。需要注意的是：使用上述过渡性词必须根据上下文需要的原则，力求自然，决不可牵强附会，让人感觉别扭。还要注意用浅显易懂的语言，通俗形象的文字表述，表述要客观准确、严谨，不能随意发挥。‎ ‎【遣词造句】‎ ‎【学习习作】‎ Dear Li Jun ,‎ Glad to hear from you . Now I’m writing to discuss with you about how to make good friends.‎ As you know , everybody needs friends, so how to make true friends is very ‎ 仿照范文中的句子，将下列汉语译成英文。‎ ‎1. 为了早晨睡得晚些，鲍勃关上了闹钟。‎ ‎2. 正如大家所知，地球围绕太阳转。‎ ‎3. 如何穿过那个峡谷仍然是个难题。‎ ‎4 .麻烦是我把他的地址丢了。‎ ‎5. 她讲英语比我多。 ‎ ‎6. 如果他找到了，他会送来的。‎ ‎7. 因为暴风雪，所有航班都被取消了，于是许多乘客只好乘火车。‎ 参考答案：‎ 仿照范文中的句子，将下列汉语译成英文。‎ ‎1.To sleep late in the morning, Bob turned off the alarm. ‎ ‎2. As is known to all, the earth moves around the sun. ‎ ‎3. How to get through the valley is still a difficult problem. ‎ ‎4 .The trouble is that I have lost his address.‎ ‎5. She speaks more English than I do. ‎ ‎6. If he has found it, he will send it. ‎ ‎7. All flights have been put off because of the snowstorm , so many passengers could do nothing but take the train. ‎ 实例指导4----Parents and Children ‎【写作任务】‎ ‎ 某英语报社开展以“Parents and Children'’为题的“看图作文”征文活动，要求根据以下三幅图用英语写一篇作文，文章内容应包括：①‎4月9日发生在李华家的事情；②你个人的感受。请你写一篇向报社投稿的征文。‎ 注意： 1．词数100左右，征文题目已给出，不计入总数；‎ ‎ 2．短文要求观点明确，结构合理，紧凑连贯。‎ ‎【学生习作】‎ Parents and Children In the evening of April 9,1 Li Hua was watching TV when his mother was busy preparing supper.2 Li Hua was so hungry that he began to complain about his mother’s slow.3 At that time, the telephone rang. She was a friend of her mother.4 She said to Li Hua today was his mother’s birthday. She wished her mother a good birthday. What a shame! Li Hua has forgot all about it.5He cares himself more than his mother.‎ ‎ At the story, I got deeply shocked. It is not easy for parents to bring us up.6 They give us lots of love and care, while we don't care for them enough. Now it's never too late to realize this and show our love and care for them. ‎ ‎ 山东省高青县第二中学高三·一班 樊镇镇 ‎【教师点评】‎ ‎ 本文为一篇夹叙夹议的图画作文。习作者能抓住图画要点，将有关事件有机地联系在一起。议论部分能切中时弊、有的放矢。既点出了李华这种行为的根源，又向社会发出了呼吁。说明作者有一定的社会洞察力和语言表达能力。从文中的错处可看出，习作者犯的都是“小”错误。而小错在一定程度上会影响英语水平的提高。若能突破这一点，习作者的写作水平一定会有很大提高。‎ 不足之处 ‎1、把In改为On。在具体的一天的早晨、晚上要用on。又如：on the morning of Octomber1‎ ‎2、把when改为while。此处表示两种行为的对比。‎ ‎3、slow 后加-ness，about后面应接名词。‎ ‎4、a friend of his mother’s “他母亲的一个朋友”‎ ‎5、当一个短语为“动词+ 副词”型，该短语的宾语又是代词，这时代词要放在副词的前面。即bring up us 改成 bring us up。‎ ‎6、时态错误：has改为 had。‎ ‎【作文示范】‎ ‎ On the evening of April 9th, Li Hua was watching TV while his mother was busy preparing for dinner in the kitchen. How attentive he was watching the TV program when the ‎ ‎ 实战演练 ‎ ‎ 假如你是一名高二的学生，名叫王宁，最近你很不开心，因为你和父母之间有一些争执。你想告诉你远在英国的笔友Tom。根据以下提示的内容写一封书信，告诉Tom你的成长烦恼。 ‎ ‎1．我的数学和语文学得很好，但是觉得英语和物理比较难。可父母却觉得我每门功课都应该是班级哩最好的。‎ ‎2．他们不尊重我，经常看我得日记。我放学回来晚了他们也很生气。‎ ‎3．我喜欢流行音乐，周末也想看电视。而父母除了学习什么也禁止我做。‎ ‎4．现在我对学习都不感兴趣了，请告诉我怎么办？‎ 注意： 词数：120左右。‎ Dear Tom.‎ ‎ These days, I feel upset, because I don't know how I can get ong well with my parents.‎ ‎ At school I am good at maths and Chinese, while I find English and physics difficult to learn. But my parents think I should always do best in every subject.‎ ‎ Besides, they don't trust me at all . They often read, my diary, and whenever I come back late, they get very angry.‎ ‎ You know I like popular music very much, and when weekends come, am dying to watchffV for a while. However, I am forbidden to do anything except studying.‎ ‎ Now I am no longer interested in my study. 1 don't know how I can I ipmve it. Can you give me some advice?‎ ‎ Yours,‎ ‎ Wang Ning 目前，由于来自学校、家长、社会等方方面面的压再加上繁重的学习任务和面临高考激烈的竞争，学生体质变得越来越差，这一点已经成为社会关注的问题。请根据下列提示，以“How to Keep Ourselves Fit"为题写一篇英文短文。 ‎ 中学生现状：‎ a. 缺乏合理营养知识，膳食摄人不平衡并且忽视早餐、挑食等； ．‎ b．运动量不足，青少年肥胖率逐年升高，肥胖症（obesity)会引发高血压、心脏病等。‎ 健身建议：‎ a．保持平衡饮食； ‎ b．多做有氧运动(aerobic exercise)，如：散步、游泳、掎车、跳舞等。‎ 注意：‎ ‎1．词数：120—150；‎ ‎2．可以适当增添细节，以使文章连贯。‎ How to Keep Ourselves Fit Now students' health is a common concern. High school students bear much pressure with heavy loads of school work and a fierce competition in the College Entrance Examination. And obesity is increasing in our society because of unbalanced diet and nutrition. Some students don't eat breakfast or are particular about food.‎ ‎ Another more serious problem is that some high school students in our country are obese or overweight, which can seriously affect our health. Obesity may contribute to other diseases, such as high blood pressure and heart disease.‎ ‎ So, as students, we should eat a balanced and nutritious diet. We should eat more vegetables and fruits. Besides, we should have proper exercises, especially aerobic exercises .Walking ,swimming, cycling, and dancing are all examples of aerobic exercise. ‎ ‎ ‎ 持续火爆的“中国好声音”比赛成为当今人们谈论的一大时髦话题。假定你是李平，你们班就“超女”现象进行了一场讨论，以下是讨论结果。请你用英文给一家英文杂志社写一封信，把你们班的讨论结果反映给报社编辑。‎ 注意：1、词数100左右，开头为你写好。‎ ‎2、可适当增减细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎3、参考词汇：促进promote 崇拜 worship 偶像 idol Dear editor,‎ ‎ Our class has recently held a heated discussion about the “Super Girls” phenomenon which was hot new in 2012. The students show their different opinions about it. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________‎ ‎ Yours,‎ ‎ Li Ping Dear editor,‎ ‎ Our class has recently held a heated discussion about the “The Voice of China” phenomenon which was hot new in 2012. The students show their different opinions about it.‎ ‎ 62% of the students support it. They think that it provides a chance for those with talent for singing to show themselves. In this way, some new singers can be trained and so it can promote the development of music. And it can also improve their consciousness of competition. ‎ However, 38 percent of the students are against it. They believe that many students spend too much time and energy on the competition. Some students even long to become famous overnight and can’t concentrate themselves on studies. What’s worse, it can cause some students to worship their idols blindly.‎ In my opinion, we can have our preference, but we shouldn’t lose ourselves in the star-pursuing tide.‎ 最近你班里的同学组成了一个调查小组，关于“你感觉幸福吗？”，对你周围的青少年做了一项调查，结果如下图所示：‎ ‎ 请你就调查结果写一篇短文，向《英语测试报》投稿。词数：120－150‎ ‎ Recently, a survey about whether you are happy was carried out by a new-formed group in our class. Hundreds of students were interviewed and we got various responses to our questions. The results are as follows.‎ ‎ The majority, that is to say, about 63% of them have a belief that they live a happy life. One of the reasons is that as a result of high living standard, we can buy whatever we want or need. Furthermore, more and more technologies bring various forms of entertainment, which make them relaxed in a short time.‎ While about one out of three think they are unhappy. In their opinion, too much pressure makes them nervous. Homework and studying occupy so much time that they have little time to enjoy themselves.‎ There are still 6% of the interviewees who are not sure their true feelings about happiness.‎ In a word, students should have an active attitude towards their life.‎ 校园里刮起了"减肥风",有的同学拼命节食,有的同学疯狂锻炼,鉴于此,校报邀请同学们针对这一现象各抒己见,踊跃投稿,谈谈你认为减肥的最佳办法是什么。内容应包括:‎ ‎1. 健康饮食与合理锻炼应该结合起来；‎ ‎2. 过度节食会严重损害人体健康；‎ ‎3. 应注意合理安排锻炼时间。词数:120左右。‎ ‎_______________________________________________________________‎ ‎_______________________________________________________________‎ ‎_______________________________________________________________‎ ‎___________________________________‎ Coming of Age Ceremony Wuhan‎ city once held a very special Coming of Age Ceremony, in which more than 500 students, wearing clothes from the Han Dynasty, performed a series of designed actions in ancient music.     In my opinion, the Coming of Age Ceremony is quite important, but I don’t agree that such a special ceremony by Wuhan city should be held. For one thing, I think wearing Han Dynasty clothing has nothing to do with this ceremony. For another thing the whole process makes students feel as if they were acting in a movie, and that reduces the solemnity of this ceremony.     In conclusion, I think the most appropriate way to celebrate it is to take an oath and to allow ourselves to be organized by the Communist Youth League to do good things and help people in need.‎