2019届高考英语二轮书面表达高分练兵场：（7）应用文写作-回复信 12页

应用文写作-回复信 ‎1、假定你是李华,你的新西兰朋友Terry将去中国朋友家做客,发邮件向你询问有关习俗。请你回复邮件。内容包括: ‎ ‎1. 到达时间; ‎ ‎2.合适的礼物; ‎ ‎3. 餐桌礼仪。 ‎ 注意: ‎ ‎1. 词数100左右; ‎ ‎2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。‎ ‎________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________‎ ‎2、假定你是中学生李华。在一位名叫Tiger Mom的学生家长的博客上,你看到如下内容。请你根据博客内容、写作要点和要求,给这位家长回复。‎ ‎         I'm the mother of a fourteen-year-old girl. I have a rule for my daughter : be among the top 5 students or get punished in one way or another.She has been doing very well in school,but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure on her. Am I wrong?‎ 写作要点:‎ ‎1. 表明自己的看法;‎ ‎2. 陈述自己的理由(可举例说明);‎ ‎3. 提出至少两条建议。‎ 要求:‎ ‎1. 短文词数不少于100(不含已写好的部分);‎ ‎2. 内容充实,结构完整,语意连贯;‎ ‎3. 书写必须清晰、工整。‎ Hi, Tiger Mom,‎ ‎    What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China. My idea is ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours sincerely,‎ Li Hua ‎3、假定你是李华,你班上的英国交换生Tommy发邮件邀请你下周参加他18岁的生日聚会。你收到邀请后很高兴,并给他回复了一封邮件,内容包括:‎ ‎1.表示感谢;‎ ‎2.准备了中国结作为礼物;‎ ‎3.按时赴约。‎ 注意:‎ ‎1. 词数80左右;‎ ‎2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;‎ ‎3. 开头及结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。‎ Dear Tommy,‎ ‎________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours sincerely,‎ Li Hua ‎4、假定你是遂宁某学校高三学生李华,你的英国朋友Peter送了你一本《牛津高阶英汉双解词典》(Oxford Advanced Learner’s English-Chinese Dictionary)作为生日礼物,‎ 请写信回复:‎ ‎1. 收到礼物表达感谢;‎ ‎2. 陈述喜欢礼物的原因;‎ ‎3.Peter生日将回赠礼物。 ‎ 注意:‎ ‎1. 词数100左右;‎ ‎2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 ‎ Dear Peter,  ‎ ‎________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________With sincerest thanks Li Hua   ‎ ‎5、假如你是李华,你的美国朋友Lily即将来华学习汉语。她想有一个中文名字,向你求助。请回复邮件,要点如下:‎ ‎1.介绍中文名字的特点;‎ ‎2.帮她取一个中文名;‎ ‎3.说明理由……。‎ 注意:‎ ‎1. 词数80左右;‎ ‎2. 适当加入细节,以使行文连贯。‎ Dear Lily,‎ ‎________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,‎ Li Hua ‎6、假定你是李华,今天上午上英语课时身体不适,课后你的外籍教师Peter送你去医院,之后他因故返回学校。现在Peter发短信了解你的病情,请根据以下内容,回复短信。‎ 内容主要包括:‎ ‎1.感谢;‎ ‎2.现状(发烧,医生建议留院观察两天);‎ ‎3.心情(尽快康复,返回课堂)。‎ 注意:‎ ‎1.词数100左右;‎ ‎2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;‎ ‎3.开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。‎ Peter,‎ ‎________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Li Hua ‎7、假如你是李华,衡水中学学生会主席( Chairman of the Student Union),近日你校收到美国友好交流学校 Roger Manverz School学生会主席John的邮件,希望你校捐赠一批传统文化书籍,供该校对此有兴趣的同学阅读,请你代表学校给John回复一封邮件,邮件中需要包含以下内容: ‎ ‎1.自我介绍; ‎ ‎2.捐赠图书的具体信息; ‎ ‎3.询问对方的收件地址和联系信息。 ‎ 注意: ‎ ‎1. 词数100左右; ‎ ‎2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 ‎ Dear John, ‎ ‎________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours faithfully, ‎ Li Hua ‎ ‎8、假如你是李华,收到笔友Mary的如下来信。请你针对信中Mary遇到的问题进行回复,给她提出建议。 ‎ Dear Li Hua,‎ ‎    How are you? I am having trouble with my deskmate Jenny at the moment. Last week, we had a maths test. The test was important and everyone had prepared for it except Jenny. During the test, she asked me to help her. I refused and didn’t let her copy from my paper. As a result, she failed ‎ the test. She is angry with me and hasn’t talked to me since then. Now I don’t know how to deal with this problem. Can you give me some advice?‎ ‎    I’m looking forward to your reply.‎ Yours,‎ Mary ‎1.写作要点: ‎ ‎• 给Jenny写信,告诉她诚实的重要性及作弊的坏处; ‎ ‎• 帮助她学习数学,使她对学习数学充满信心; ‎ ‎• 如果她的英语比你好,可以让她帮你学英语,因为互帮互助可以加深(deepen)友谊。‎ ‎2.词数100左右(开头与结尾已给出,不计入总词数)。 ‎ Dear Mary, ‎ ‎    I’m sorry  you are having trouble with your friend.‎ ‎________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________    Best wishes.‎ Yours,‎ Li Hua ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ 答案以及解析 ‎1答案及解析：‎ 答案：‎ Dear Terry,‎ ‎    How are you doing? In your last letter, you asked me about being a guest to a Chinese friend’s home. Now, I am writing to inform you of some relevant details.‎ ‎    To begin with, according to our tradition, you are supposed to arrive early, so that you can help the family prepare the dinner, which is not only meaningful but also interesting. Besides, you’d better bring some gifts, such as a book or a Chinese knot. What’s more, when you are enjoying the meal, you need to avoid making noises while chewing food.‎ ‎    Hopefully, these suggestions would be helpful for you. I have the confidence that you will have a great time. I am looking forward to your good news.‎ ‎    Best wishes!‎ Yours,‎ Li Hua ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎2答案及解析：‎ 答案：     Hi ,TigerMom.      What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China. My idea is that it is not quite right for you to do so.      Although high grades are an important factor in evaluating students and for their future university admission, development in wisdom, emotion, health, and life attitude should never be ignored. There are many examples around us.Some all-A students in school have turned out not to be as successful in society as they were expected. The reason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Furthermore, punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.     So I suggest that you take your friends’ advice. More importantly, let her live like a lovely girl; let her have more friends and social activities; and let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do.‎ 解析：亮点句式:‎ What puzzles you is...‎ My idea is that it is ...‎ The reason is that...‎ So I suggest that...‎ 名师点评:本文从论点、论据和论证三个方面,较好地表达了自己的观点。全文时态正确,句型丰富,过渡自然,实为一篇佳作。‎ ‎ ‎ ‎3答案及解析：‎ 答案：‎ 高分范文 Dear Tommy,‎ ‎    I'm really honored to have been invited to attend your 18th birthday party next week. In return for your kindness, I've prepared some Chinese knots as gifts for you. I strongly hope that you'll like them, as this might be your first birthdav celebrated in China. By the way, please tell me if you need my help.‎ ‎    It occurs to me in recent days that your party is near, and I'm very excited to attend the party on time with our sincere friends.‎ ‎    I wish you all the best.‎ Yours sincerely,‎ Li Hua ‎(91 words)‎ 标准范文 Dear Tommy,‎ ‎    What a pleasant surprise to hear that youll celebrate your 18th birthday next week! I really feel happy for it. Therefore, I've prepared some Chinese knots for you, which are typical Chinese artworks. Actually, I made them myself, and it's my sincere hope. What's more, please tell me if I can be of some help to you.‎ ‎    It will be only a few days before the party is held, and I’m looking forward to attending it on time, celebrating your birthday with other friends.‎ ‎    Best wishes.‎ Yours sincerely,‎ Li Hua ‎(86 words )‎ 解析：‎ 审题分析 ‎1. 审体裁:应用文之邮件;‎ ‎2. 审人称:以第一人称为主;‎ ‎3. 审时态:以一般现在时为主;‎ ‎4. 审布局:段落的过渡需自然,合情合理;‎ ‎5. 审立意:以中国元素提升主题。‎ 思路点拨 ‎1. 寒暄问候语导人;‎ ‎2. 根据步骤化提纲作文的需要,可采用三段式进行写作;‎ ‎3. 第一段阐述因受邀参加Tommy的18岁生日聚会而感到高兴——并准备了中国结作为礼物;‎ ‎4. 第二段叙述自己的幸福与兴奋一因为要见到很多的老朋友等;‎ ‎5. 第三段给出问候祝福语;‎ ‎6. 书信结束语。‎ 高分范文揭秘 该篇习作结构清晰,要点齐全,语言流畅。使用了较高级的词汇:be honored to do,in return for, it occurs to sb., in recent days, attend the party on time等。文章中句式变化层出不穷,如:that引导的宾语从句,as引导的原因状语从句,if引导的条件状语从句,that引导的主语从句等,这些多样化句式的精准表达都给文章增添了很多亮点。本题满分15分,本文得14分。‎ 标准范文精彩点评 ‎1. 本篇习作虽用词不多,但读来紧凑,使人一目了然,且思路清晰:‎ ‎2. 运用了一些高级句式结构。如what引导的感叹句、that引导的宾语从句、which引导的非限制性定语从句、if引导的条件状语从句、before引导的时间状语从句等。‎ ‎3. 时态把握准确到位,如一般现在时、现在完成时及一般将来时。‎ ‎4. 高级词汇的大量使用,也使文章增色不少如:a pleasant surprise, feel happy for, one's sincere hope, of some help to sb., look forward to,attend it on time等。总之,这确实是一篇佳作。‎ ‎ ‎ ‎4答案及解析：‎ 答案：‎ Dear Peter,‎ ‎    ①Words are really not enough to express my gratitude to you for your timely gift for my birthday-a copy of the Oxford Advanced Learner’s English-Chinese Dictionary.‎ ‎    There are many reasons why I refer to it as a timely gift.②First, I’m preparing a speech for the 21st Century Cup National High School English Speaking Competition in six weeks.③Furthermore, although I already had an English-Chinese dictionary, it only has Chinese explanations. This new one features explanations in both Chinese and English.④In addition, it’s known that the Oxford Advanced Learner’s English-Chinese Dictionary places emphasis on more modern English words than others do.‎ ‎⑤When your birthday comes, I hope I can return the favor by giving you such a valuable and thoughtful present too.‎ ‎     With sincerest thanks Li Hua ‎ ‎ ‎5答案及解析：‎ 答案：‎ Dear Lily,‎ ‎    I'm very glad to know that you are coining to China. Of course, a Chinese name will help you better fit in with the new culture.‎ ‎    A Chinese name usually consists of two or three characters, which often cam some special significance or expectations. As you are an energetic and warm-hearted girl, I recommend the name, Li Yang. The family name, which is shared by millions of Chinese, has the similar pronunciation as Lily. The given name means the sun in Chinese.‎ ‎    I hope you like your new name and make rapid progress in China.‎ Yours,‎ Li Hua ‎(95 words)‎ 解析：‎ 审题分析 ‎1. 理清楚作者“我(李华)”与收信人Lily之间的关系,在人称上务必一致;‎ ‎2. 有效整合要点之间的逻辑关系,适当调序,切不可盲目逐条翻译;‎ ‎3. 根据语言特点的表达需要,可适当进行梳理,选择恰当的句式委婉准确地进行表达;‎ ‎4. 把握好中文名字的准确解释;‎ ‎5. 文章的时态重点考虑一般现在时。‎ 思路点拨 ‎1. 格式已给出,不必考虑;‎ ‎2. 对Lily的到来表示欢迎;‎ ‎3. 很愿意为Lily取一个中文名字并说明理由;‎ ‎4. 解释中文名字的具体含义;‎ ‎5. 信件结束语。‎ 精彩点评 ‎1. 作者具有良好的英语语言驾驭能力,如多处用到了复合句, 且每一句表达精准到位。‎ ‎2. 文章描述准确到位、用词精确谨慎,如help sb. better Gt in with, consist of, millions of, the similar pronunciation as, make rapid progress 等。‎ ‎3. 所选句式难易交错,固定句式及地道的短语赋予了文章别样的风采,如I'm very glad to know that...,I hope…等。‎ ‎4. 最后一句 I hope you like your new name and make rapid progress in China.则更能表达作者朴素的想法,精彩圆满地完成了写作。‎ ‎ ‎ ‎6答案及解析：‎ 答案：‎ Peter,‎ ‎    Thank you for texting. It's kind of you to take me to hospital when I felt sick in the English lesson this morning. I am quite grateful for what you have done for me.‎ ‎    Because of your timely help, I could get treated in time, or I couldn't imagine what it would be like. I am much better now. My doctor thinks I've just got a cold. But I have been told that I need to stay in hospital for two days and receive further examination because I still have a fever.‎ ‎    I am looking forward to being well soon and with you again in your lively class. See you then.‎ Li Hua ‎ ‎ ‎7答案及解析：‎ 答案：‎ Dear John,‎ I am Li Hua, chairman of the Student Union of Hengshui High School. I am writing this letter on behalf of our school that we are more than glad to donate to your school some books on Chinese traditional culture.‎ After discussion, we plan to donate about a hundred books, whose topics vary from Chinese ancient philosophy, Chinese traditional painting and calligraphy to Chinese classical literature.‎ We plan to wrap them in a big parcel and post to your school. So I hope you can offer me the accurate address of your school as well as the name of the person in charge of receiving the parcel.‎ Looking forward to your reply.‎ Yours faithfully,‎ Li Hua ‎ ‎ ‎8答案及解析：‎ 答案：Dear Mary,‎ ‎    I’m sorry you are having trouble with your friend. Here are some tips that may help you. First, if she doesn’t talk to you, why not write to her? You can explain the importance of honesty and the harm of cheating in the exam. I’m sure she will understand you. Also, you can try to help her with her maths. Only in this way can she make progress and believe in herself. If she is better than you in English, you can ask her to help you with your English.‎ ‎    I’m sure your friendship will be deepened by helping each other.‎ ‎    Best wishes.‎ Yours,‎ Li Hua ‎ ‎