【英语】2019届二轮复习书面表达技法指导六规避重复，使用多样化的表达（6页） 5页

‎2019届二轮复习书面表达技法指导六规避重复，使用多样化的表达 ‎[技法综述]‎ 在英语写作中，我们常常会看到很多同学在一篇作文中，重复使用同一个单词、短语或句式，这样句子就没有新鲜感，容易使阅卷人产生视觉疲劳，会影响考生的得分。‎ 为了使表达更生动，更富表现力，同学们在写作时应尽量避免重复使用同一词语或句式来表达同一意思，使用多样化的表达方式可以使文章更具可读性。‎ We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also built a library where the old playground used to be.‎ ‎→We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also set up a library where the old playground used to be.‎ When going on trips, we should behave ourselves and obey the culture and customs there. Besides, the environment should be protected.‎ ‎→When going on trips, we should behave ourselves and obey the culture and customs there. Besides, the environment is supposed to be protected.‎ Most of my classmates wanted to go to a park while I wanted to go to a nicer place. ‎ ‎→Most of my classmates wanted to go to a park while I had an idea of going to a nicer place. ‎ I'm writing to ask for your help. ... I'd appreciate it if you could help me.‎ ‎→I'm writing to ask for your help. ... I'd appreciate it if you could do me a favour.‎ We can borrow five books at most, and we can keep them for ten days.‎ ‎→We can borrow five books at most, and they can be kept for ten days.‎ I like reading while my brother likes watching football matches.‎ ‎→I like reading while watching football matches is my brother's favour.‎ We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. We may have different ways to deal with such a situation.‎ ‎→We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. Various ways may be used to deal with such a situation.‎ ‎[阅卷现场]‎ ‎　　(2016·全国卷Ⅱ)假定你是李华，你校摄影俱乐部(photography club)将举办国际中学生摄影展。请给你的英国朋友Peter写封信，请他提供作品。信的内容包括：‎ ‎1.主题：环境保护；‎ ‎2.展览时间；‎ ‎3.投稿邮箱：intlphotoshow@gmschool.com。‎ 注意：1.词数100左右；‎ ‎2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ 考生作文 Dear Peter，‎ I'm writing to invite you to participate in the International High School Student Photography Show to be held by our school photography club.‎ The theme of the International High School Student Photography Show is environment protection. It aims to call on people to do what they can to protect the environment. It will start from September 1st and last for four weeks. As your best friend, I know you do well in taking photos. So I suggest you participating in it. You can not only show your talent but also do something for the environmental protection. ‎ If you want to participate, you can send your photos to intlphotoshow@gmschool. com. ‎ Looking forward to your early reply.‎ Yours，‎ ‎ Li Hua 点评与优化 ‎[名师点评]‎ 本文词数符合要求，复合句和非谓语动词的使用比较到位。总体来说是一篇不错的作文。下面主要谈一下存在的问题：‎ ‎1.本文出现了一定的重复。例如participate (in)出现了三次，我们如果用join (in)，take part (in)来替代另外两个会更好。‎ ‎2.有些词汇和句子还可以优化。例如第二段的do well in可变为be skilled at；第二段的前两句可以用非谓语动词合成一个句子；suggest所在的句子可以使用虚拟语气；not only所在的句子可以使用倒装等。‎ ‎[尝试优化]‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ 作文提升 Dear Peter，‎ I'm writing to invite you to join in the International High School Student Photography Show to be held by our school photography club.‎ The theme of the International High School Student Photography Show is environment protection, aiming to call on people to do what they can to protect the environment. It will start from September 1st and last for four weeks. As your best friend, I know you are skilled at taking photos. So I suggest you (should) participate in it. Not only can you show your talent but also do your bit for the environmental protection. ‎ If you want to take part, you can send your photos to intlphotoshow@gmschool.com.‎ Looking forward to your early reply.‎ Yours，　‎ ‎ Li Hua ‎ [随堂训练]‎ Ⅰ.为了避免重复，请用不同的表达法替换第二处黑体部分 ‎1．He likes playing football while his brother likes playing the piano.‎ 第二个likes→enjoys/is fond of ‎2．We all know that when we need help, our friends will help us.‎ help us→lend us a helping hand/do us a favor ‎3．30 percent of girls want to become teachers while only 5 percent of boys want to do that.‎ 第二个want→would like ‎4．Firstly, you should know about your own interests and advantages. Secondly, you should turn to your teachers and parents for help and consider their advice.‎ 第二个should→are supposed to ‎5．I have decided to participate in the singing competition. If you want to participate, you can sign up on our school website.‎ 第二个participate→take part Ⅱ.书面表达(祝贺信)‎ ‎(2017·福州市综合质量检测)假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Lucy在当地的一所孔子学院(Confucius Institute)学习，你刚获悉她在学院举办的中文诗词(poetry)比赛中荣获一等奖。请你用英语给她写一封电子邮件表示祝贺，并希望她有机会来中国深造。‎ 注意：1.词数100左右；‎ ‎2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎ ‎【参考范文】‎ Dear Lucy，‎ I'm pleased to learn you've just won first prize in the Chinese poetry competition held in your institute. I'm writing to offer my sincere congratulations to you.‎ It came as no surprise to me because I know you love Chinese culture, especially Chinese poetry, and you've been studying in the local Confucius Institute for years. I'm so proud to see all your efforts have paid off.I hope you can have a chance to come to China for further study in the near future and have a better understanding of my country.‎ Wish you greater progress in the study of Chinese poetry.‎ Yours sincerely，‎ Li Hua